Tips/Tricks

[tr3nt]

I been typin out some of the stuff that comes into my head while im listening to music... never used it in competing or anything, Can I get some tips of where I can improve pls.

I'm so sick and tired of the
whole white and black individuality.
Can't we all be one happy group
sittin' listenin' to one big music loop,
kicking rhymes, makin lines, dodgin fines.

Life grows colder
as I grow older
put these lyrics in one folder
and make it stick to you like solder
and make sure she knows coz' I tolder her

My words are never unlyrical
for a kid from here, it's typical
im gonna kick shit, im still at school
ima get yo' head boppin by the end fool.

these words are authentic
not need to authenticate
my shit, will make you pop
so listen up, listen lots.

This is one of my favorite styles:

hey, yo, you see me killin' mics
you might see me stealin sights
even possibly causin' fights'
but yanno.. its a damn delight.

Ima newbie to the rap game, but fuckit, ima make it good
introduce me to your friends, make me known, show me the hood
this'll be one hell of a fun ride, yanno, kick me from the rest
ima fuckin bludge this lifetime like it's an hour long maths test.

What do you all think?
tr3nt.

[S.W.A.T]

yo man that was aight

[tr3nt]

hey, can I get some more opinions pls.
I can probably post some more stuff.. but just wanna know how im doing with this.

[Killa Jones]

it was ok dawg

[S.W.A.T]

yo man just keep spittin

[Gh0$T]

ye keep doin yo thang man!
peace

[jersey#12]

yea bro keep on doin ya shit :wink:

[RaP~$aViOuR]

same here dawg, jus keep spittin

[tr3nt]

I was listening to Lose Yourself the other day, picking out random words, and rhyming them, I came out with 1 verse:

I do have an opportunity
to cease family
I am calm and ready
im chockin already
I''m cruisin down the road, goin steady
My ex bitch was n still'is a slut, also greedy

- I know most of the lines are from the song, but I was trying to 'mix and match' if you know what I mean.

this is also what came outta my head that day:

Hip hop, more that a game
more than steppin up to fame
not for squares, not for the lame
but rap, and hip hop, s'all the same

I was hated on as a kid in pre school
I was fuck with, made to look like a fool
nothin much has changed, still a tool
all's I wanna do is be cool.

You dunno what I is capable of
I live in a bummy town, everyone's pov
all you have to do to get infected is cough
no justice is around here, they all get off

My hair is turning gray
I've had my day
I feel left out, might just lay
But I do know my life is rapcay.

Your freestyle is like my man Kyle's
when he raps, he spits out vile.

[S.W.A.T]

yo wah sup tight again