Mr. M vs. Junior087 [Votes Needed]

[Mr. M]

rules-
5-10 lines
no feeding or biting
no d/r hate votes

CHOP, Your face, i'd like to, top your pace,
Which is on top of haste but not yet poppin cases,
Once again I'm gonna call u and untuck the case,
Unload the guns and afterwards, pop your face,
Too old to drop shit, u belong in a dump,
Dropped down with an inauduble thump,
I'm gonna pull out the pump,
In your face i'l stomp,
Aint no time to grump,
Yo ass just got jumpd~

[Mr. M]

http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=4795
http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=3238

[Tech Skillz]

http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?p=61070#post61070
http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?p=61072#post61072

i'm punching and swinging to bring Mr. M to his end
Never knew how to rhyme he just loved to pretend
hold a grude toward the horror of never going foward
need luck to win, so go and start picking some clovers
coming and start swinging undestructably to hit, plow!
your number's called and picked out, this rap, i suggest you get out....

need votes

[Tech Skillz]

Need votes....

[child prodigy]

Mr. M

CHOP, Your face, i'd like to, top your pace,
Which is on top of haste but not yet poppin cases,
Once again I'm gonna call u and untuck the case,
Unload the guns and afterwards, pop your face,
not the greatest. 'cases' then 'case' (right below it?)
Too old to drop shit, u belong in a dump,
Dropped down with an inauduble thump,
I'm gonna pull out the pump,
In your face i'l stomp,
Aint no time to grump,
Yo ass just got jumpd~
it seemed like you tried too hard to make it into multies.

not your best work. you're trying to keep it simple and sweet but it was too simplistic. You could have treated your last 6 lines as longer, yet fewer lines .


Junior

i'm punching and swinging to bring Mr. M to his end
Never knew how to rhyme he just loved to pretend
good opener considering overall it's 6 lines long.
hold a grude toward the horror of never going foward
need luck to win, so go and start picking some clovers
my favourite line
coming and start swinging undestructably to hit, plow!
your number's called and picked out, this rap, i suggest you get out....
not bad for a closer.
concisive and stright to the point. nice flow too.


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Overall: Junior

Mr. M, the main reason you didn't get my vote was becasue your flow was off. Flow is key when you're considering such a small limit to lines and bars. (bringing me to next point) Junior's was favoured more was also because he had less lines. it seemed like you tried to drag your verse on to make it fit 10 lines. while Junior's was staright to the point.


that's all folks.

take care, both of you. peace

[shinoda]

Multies - Mr M, although they were forced and non-sensical
Flow - Mr.M? Neither had particularly good flow
Structure - Junior
Personals - Neither
Punches - Junior..only one punch
Vocabulary - neither

(COMPLETE LACK OF NEEDING RHYMING WORDS -Junior.... Dude wtf, what happened to rhyming in there?)

Both of you need to elevate. A battle with no punches is NOT a battle. A story in rhyme form is not a battle. Words written that don't rhyme are known as sentances, not a rap. Come on guys, elevate.

Junior

[Killa Jones]

Multies - Mr M,
Flow - Mr.M
Structure - Junior
Personals - -
Punches junior
Vocabulary - -
enjoyment: junior
Overall: junior

lame spits from both seen much better from junior. mr m keep spitting man ull get there soon

[madchild]

CLOSED Junior wins by KO (3-0).