Killa Jones vs. C Martin (3-0) KO

[Killa Jones]

I'll leave you hanging like a door with broken hinges
Your head banging from noise due to killa recordz binges.

while im out parting, your at home, studying my rhymes
man get a life stop immatating macally culkin, playing tricks on grimes.

You just a little mumbling idiot, with a s-s-stut-t-ter
This fucking little retard, his spits he just mutters.

Im top of the league while you in relegation
You bop with the gays and that so called federation

The dog in your avatar is only like you coz you a bitch
a four legged fur ball, flees on c martin he starts to itch

My warm up spits to the up coming tournament
im'a blaze every fool like im smokin a blunt!!!


Yeh little rough spit. freestlye.

[c martin]

yo i stomp on u like godzilla
now we all know whos the real killa

yo u always had a like in rhyme
i seen u lip singin time after time

yo bitch i make u look like a big ball of slime
i make u is sick as grime

yo when i kill u its like a japanese movie
people cant say words cuz there so very choosy

after i sign with after math
i see u and u get destroid in my path

ya i know people dont get killed in whales
but u did and this foren shit necer fails

i should of left u with cuts from my bitches fingernails
but ya thats the wrong way to treat gales

u try to make up a beef
until i knock u out and give u back ur teef

ill rip through with a spere
and ill drown ur mother in her own tears

i know thats what every1 fears
till i run over u and switch to 4th gear.

when i see u i feel nuthing but agervation
i wanna jack u up and make funeral reservations

we have killers like me all across the nation
but for now ur body goess to the train station

they will take u back to whales
u get licked by all the gay males

thats why ur emails naked boy
because fags use u like a sex toy

kinda shitty 3-0 KO ok

[madchild]

Killa Jones:

I'll leave you hanging like a door with broken hinges
Your head banging from noise due to killa recordz binges.

Good intro.

while im out parting, your at home, studying my rhymes
man get a life stop immatating macally culkin, playing tricks on grimes.

I liked this bar.

You just a little mumbling idiot, with a s-s-stut-t-ter
This fucking little retard, his spits he just mutters.

Filler bar sort of, but I understand what you're saying with his spits.

Im top of the league while you in relegation
You bop with the gays and that so called federation

Didn't really appeal to me.

The dog in your avatar is only like you coz you a bitch
a four legged fur ball, flees on c martin he starts to itch

Not bad idea. First line needs work.

My warm up spits to the up coming tournament
im'a blaze every fool like im smokin a blunt!!!

Not really a great closer and doesn't rhyme.

C Martin:

yo i stomp on u like godzilla
now we all know whos the real killa

yo u always had a like in rhyme
i seen u lip singin time after time

yo bitch i make u look like a big ball of slime
i make u is sick as grime

yo when i kill u its like a japanese movie
people cant say words cuz there so very choosy

I counted "yo" 4 times, starting each bar wtf.
Intro bar - Wasn't bad.
Second bar - Was shit.
Third bar - Kind of fed off his verse, but again was shitty written.
Fourth bar - I don't understand your comparison of Japanese movies to "choosy". Just doesn't make sense. You need to portray what you're talking about better. Expand on your bars and thoughts and try to make them more thoroughly thought out, creative, and all your ideas expressed. Right now, they're just a little too simplistic. You also need to make your bars and disses come harder.

after i sign with after math
i see u and u get destroid in my path

Haha destroyed? This isn't astroids, steroids, but after Killa was done with you, he left you with hemorrhoids.

ya i know people dont get killed in whales
but u did and this foren shit necer fails

Haha whales are a mammal, he lives in Wales lmao. Second line was uncomprehensible.

i should of left u with cuts from my bitches fingernails
but ya thats the wrong way to treat gales

Nice bar. I imagine your referring to the sprinter Gale Devers with the long claws?

u try to make up a beef
until i knock u out and give u back ur teef

Man, just spell it teeth, it makes you look smarter.

ill rip through with a spere
and ill drown ur mother in her own tears

Filler.

i know thats what every1 fears
till i run over u and switch to 4th gear.

Mehh

when i see u i feel nuthing but agervation
i wanna jack u up and make funeral reservations

Gah ... run your rhymes through a spell checker!

we have killers like me all across the nation
but for now ur body goess to the train station

Wtf. Why does it go to the train station?

they will take u back to whales
u get licked by all the gay males

This was bullshit. Most indoubiously.

thats why ur emails naked boy
because fags use u like a sex toy

Bad closer.

C Martin - You are slowly improving and had a few good bars and ideas, but you need to expand on them, and instead of dropping something just because it rhymes, work on it until it becomes a solid bar before you release it to the world and my eyes again.

Vote - Killa Jones

[Killa Jones]

1-0 uppin
thanks 4 da breakdown

[TfLaMeZ]

Flow: KILLA
Creativity: Tie
Wordplay: Killa
Structure: Killa, he used the same structure way better
multis: Neither
enjoyment: Killa
punches: Killa
Personals: neither
Blah factor: C. Martin
OVERALL VOTE: KILLA JONES

nice battle

[Eluzion]

Flow: KILLA
Creativity: Killa
Wordplay: Killa
Structure: Killa
multis: None
enjoyment: Killa
punches: Killa
Personals: Killa
Blah factor: C. Martin (I had to carry on from TFlamez with the Blah Factor)

Overall: Killa Jones

Nice battle.

[Killa Jones]

3-0 thanks guys

[madchild]

CLOSED Killa Jones wins by KO (3-0).