Killa Jones vs. -MaKaVeLi- (5-1)

[-MaKaVeLi-]

RULES:

Min: 10 Lines!
Max: 20 Lines!
Beef: NO!
Vote: Break down verse, bar by bar (just read mad childs rules)!!
Spit: Me, you, you, Me!
KO: 3-0!
Win: First to 5!
Other: No freeposting while battle is in progress (only verses & votes)!!



My verse:

U a bitch made punk when u stepped i was high,
murdered u in seconds no time to stratagize,
popped me with a magnum but i dont feel shit,
im invulnerable, my whole mind and bodys legit,
clips left empty, shells fell to the floor,
this aint the first time i popped u i know i seen ya befo,
i got a hit list and u numba one on tha spot,
my options seemed open whether to kill u or not,
ma machette all bloody cuz i sliced u up,
buried u alive and i left u like king TUT,
if i beat u, i dont give a shit if u rap or u dont,
i dont give a shit, ill hurt u whether u's drunk or u stoned,
nigga think twice about makin foolish decisons,
battlin sum 1 better when you urself has no persision

[Killa Jones]

I bet your brains hurting after trying so hard
Your doing all the running but you aint gaining no yards
I didnt feel insulted from one single diss
Will i read your next rhyme or will i give it a miss
You say your dropping clips, you aint nothing but a studio gangsta
you should team up with redman and sing original pranksta
I werent even feeling a single punch from your lines
Was their a punch? There was...Your lyin.
This is my first battle back from taking time off
If i was you i'd quit rapping and turn to a goth
You said i make foolish decisions, and one was taking this battle
you talked random bullshit, its really called prattle(foolish and irrelevant talk)
You couldnt hurt me even if you had a ten inch blade
im wesley snipes kicking your ass with my rage
you say your an mc when really you just a masquerade(pretend to be something that you are not)
Now im'a spit my second spit and your already afraid

[Killa Jones]

Killa's back, with his second attack,dropping more bombs than iraq
Your whack, your rhymes slack and stop thinking your pac

This is it, yeh this is my second flow, shall i go fast or shall i go slow
Im'a delivier hard punches leaving your eyes looking like pissholes in the snow
You really a loner, Im the simpsons you'd be moe
While i'd be a celebrity, guest starring on the show.

Im using simple wordplay because i dont have to go all out
Ive already beaten you and thats without a doubt
My style is unique, original and trigger happy
Ready to blow up, making you shit in your nappy
You cant compete with this as i take no prisoners
The New branch of my label intitled the visoners
They make the beats while i run the raps
Im'a sit back and wait for your crap.

Killa Recordz, The Visoners!

[madchild]

Note: For battles more than 1 round in length, I recommend you allow voting on categories as well. Especially since it's alot quicker than bar-by-bar breakdown for most and can offer the same value for criticism.

Make sure both of you post 2 Links each where you have voted on other CURRENT battles. Reminder: Votes MUST be either by category or bar-by-bar breakdown.

Sorry for the freepost, but this is necessary.

[Killa Jones]

Where I've Voted.

http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?p=46391#post46391

http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?p=46397#post46397

[-MaKaVeLi-]

im smashin bottles on ya head leavin deadly scars,
bringing back horrid memories to make u go bizzare,
whats up with u talkin bout tha simpsons n moe?
i left u blown up with grenades and calico's,
u talkin bout shittin in nappys while i be hittin swtiches,
fuk the bitches, im on a roll to be tha richest,
im a souldja, ur the enemy, ur ma primary target,
murdered u in cold to leave u in this life to be departed,
gimme a standing ovation bitch cuz i just took this battle,
no more lyrics, all left to hear is the brattle,(rattlin sound)
after the murder i left ya body ta be exposed of,
let ta paramedics take care n ya body be disposed of
.................................................. .....................


i Gotta Roll....VOteZ PlZ....

[$tingeR]

mak u need to post your links...

structure:mak
creativity:killer
flow:mak
punches:killer
personals:werent really any
vocab:id say mak
metas:killa
multies:not many if any worth voting on...
wordplay:did see any
enjoyment:killa

VOTE: KILLA JONES

[Killa Jones]

1-0 uppin

[hawkeye]

structure:mak
creativity:kill
flow:mak
punches:kill
personals:n
vocab:mak
metas:kill
multies:n
wordplay:n
enjoyment:killa

killa starting to get rid of the rust?(been awhile since u battled here)

vote- KILLa JoNes :p

[Killa Jones]

2-0 uppin for more votes. Aint battled coz i been settin up my studio. still aint done. lol

[sparkaholic2006]

structure:mak
creativity:kill
flow:mak
punches: mak 50% kill 50%
personals: none
vocab:mak
metas:kill
multies: none
wordplay: none
enjoyment: mak


dis ant no d/r or hate


~VOTE~MAK
i liked his shit but dont get me wrong damn killa nice shit damn homez nice but to me mak had a littl eedge


~OUT~

[Killa Jones]

2-1 uppin

[bad news]

structure:killa
creativity:killa
flow:killa
punches: mak
personals: none
vocab:killa
metas:killa
multies: killa
wordplay: mak
enjoyment: mak

vote-killa jones

[Eluzion]

structure:Killa j
creativity:Killa j
flow:Killa j
punches: mak
personals: Killa j
vocab:Killa j
metas:Killa j
multies: mak
wordplay: Killa j
enjoyment: mak

Vote-Killa Jones

[Killa Jones]

4-1 uppin

[BigMann313]

structure: mak
creativity:killer
flow:mak
punches:killer
personals: none
vocab: mak
metas:killa
multies: killa
wordplay:killa
enjoyment:killa

VOTE: KILLA JONES

[Killa Jones]

5-1.
Good Battle Mak. Thanks For Voting Guys.

[madchild]

CLOSED Killa Jones wins 5-1.