Volvic vs. BigMann313 (3-0) KO

[MC K]

5 bars.....as u said
no crew votes or dickridin votes.......I'm new but I'll know
first to 3 votes...blah blah blah = winner

I will spit whenever...gotta do alot of stuff.....will do soon

[BigMann313]

its crazy how you think you can spit
and its the truth how you dont got a dick
you spit inefficient rhymes that suck like hell
i spit rhymes of crazy that you cant fuckin tell
theres a differnces between your skills
you took exlax instead of emz purple pills
thats why you shit instead of spitting lines
the way you write, you should be fined
ill give you to the count of 3 to run and hide
cuz with the lyrics i got, theres no way u can survive

Links:
http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=3776&page=1&pp=10
http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=3854

[MC K]

Alrite soz for the delay was at a party last nite.....haha it was a great laugh....anyhow here it is, wrote it earlier.

1. Arousing up to your name Big MANN ~
Getting excited as you listen to your fav artist Mr. Wi-NAN

2. Being a gangsta from arabia your (A)ss is an illegal (I)mmigrant (M)ayne ~
I'll trespass over your ass AIM the gun at your lame lines to maim*

3. Fat Man Scoop and Bizarre judges on fat idol as Big Mann's 313 pounds awake to shake ~
Legendary Chaos as Big Mann (3)nters (1)abour (3)mitting baby earthquakes

4.On interests where's the food coz I see you sized up your tits without a perMET ~
Your a Big Mann, made you squeal as I circumcised your bits on eminem.NET

5. From your interest quality (I.Q.) you and your hom-IES will find this han-DY ~
Basically Pac described you excellent-LY on the last verse of 'Why U Turn On Me'. :D

Explanations if ye need it:
1. His fav artists..one is Mario Winan...haha...Big man gettin aroused.
2. His AIM address is ArabGansta
maim - to wound or injure so that some part of the body is useless
3. His name is BigMann313...hence Big Man weighs 313 pounds and as seen ye's are on an eminem site I guess u should understand teh number 3 been used as an E backwards so I did and used a 1 as an L
4. hahahaha
5. If you like Pac and heard this song you know wot Im on about.

Link 1: http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=3826&page=2

[RipShit]

Consistency/Structure: Bigmann
Creativity: Volvic
Enjoyable: Volvic
Flow: Bigmann
Metaphors: Volvic
Multies: Volvic
Personal: Volvic
Punches: Volvic
Vocabulary: Volvic
Wordplay: Volvic
Overall: Volvic

Bigmann's Total: 2
Volvic's Total: 9

Final Vote: Volvic

Both of you did well. Little advice for Bigmann, incorporate more multies/personals into your verse, and as for Volvic, be careful adding so many sylables that it makes your verse sound choppy. Props to both of you.

[speedbump]

Ok lets see....

Structure: Bigmann
Creativity: Both
Enjoyable: Volvic
Flow: Bigmann
Metaphors: Volvic
Multies: Volvic
Personal: Volvic
Punches: Both
Vocabulary: Volvic
Wordplay: Volvic

Overall : Volvic

OK Volvic seem to had take this more seriously while bigmann it look like you did that real fast... almost all your lines where great but they all needed something more..... you shoulda take more time to make your spit more complex....
That line per example : "you took exlax instead of emz purple pills" coulda be a fucking good punch if you had put more efforts in it.....

That's my oppinion and vote..... what i think...

[madchild]

BigMann313:

its crazy how you think you can spit
and its the truth how you dont got a dick

Really bad intro. "Spit" doesn't rhyme with "dick" and this wasn't even a diss. There was no foundation behind what you were saying.

you spit inefficient rhymes that suck like hell
i spit rhymes of crazy that you cant fuckin tell

You just compared inefficient rhymes to hell, which makes no sense and has nothing in common. You have said "spit" a total of 3 times in the first 2 parts. I wouldn't advise using that word more than twice in such a small verse as this.

theres a differnces between your skills
you took exlax instead of emz purple pills

The whole bar change brain waves from one line to the next making no sense.

thats why you shit instead of spitting lines
the way you write, you should be fined

Meh, pretty overplayed bar. You need to get a little more creative. Try using metaphors to diss your opponent by comparing them to something and multies in your bars.

ill give you to the count of 3 to run and hide
cuz with the lyrics i got, theres no way u can survive

"Hide" and "survive" don't rhyme. Pretty bad closer and verse overall.

Score: 5/10

Volvic:

1. Arousing up to your name Big MANN ~
Getting excited as you listen to your fav artist Mr. Wi-NAN

I guess it wasn't a bad intro. Doesn't make alot of sense to me, but you explained what you meant by it.

2. Being a gangsta from arabia your (A)ss is an illegal (I)mmigrant (M)ayne ~
I'll trespass over your ass AIM the gun at your lame lines to maim*

What the hell is a Mayne? A pretty good bar though.

3. Fat Man Scoop and Bizarre judges on fat idol as Big Mann's 313 pounds awake to shake ~
Legendary Chaos as Big Mann (3)nters (1)abour (3)mitting baby earthquakes

I didn't like this bar one bit. You're pretty creative, I just don't like your delivery, but everyone is different.

4.On interests where's the food coz I see you sized up your tits without a perMET ~
Your a Big Mann, made you squeal as I circumcised your bits on eminem.NET

First line didn't make much sense to me either ... did you mean permit? Overall bar kind of sucked. You definitely show potential though, you just have to get your point across better and with better flow.

5. From your interest quality (I.Q.) you and your hom-IES will find this han-DY ~
Basically Pac described you excellent-LY on the last verse of 'Why U Turn On Me'.

Umm IQ actually stands for "Intelligence Quotient". Meh, bar could have been better.

I couldn't really make heads or tails of your bars and I usually understand verses pretty good. I think you need to work on how you get your point across. You definitely had better punches than BigMann and show potential.

Score: 6/10

Vote: Volvic

[madchild]

CLOSED Volvic wins by KO (3-0).

I'm keeping this open cause I'm demanding LINKS be posted by the battlers. This is part of the rules and if you wish to spit again on this board, these links better show up. I've already PMed both of you.

Comments on their spits are welcomed, but the battle is over.

[MC K]

I know permit is spelled as permet but its text battle so changing it to permet doesnt matter as the meaning people get and it rhymes better. I know IQ means Intelligence quotient but I used a different meaning for it showing it doesnt exist in his world. But I dnt mean anytin by my lines of course. And I know I ave to try and present my lines better...I ave been workin on that. Oh and Im goin to vote on other battles now.

[madchild]

I don't advise you changing the spelling of words to make it look similar to the rhyming word. Even though this is text battle, it is even more important that you spell your words correct, so we understand what you're saying and the meaning behind the line. As I said above, "permet" is not a word and you should of left it as "permit" since that's the correct spelling, and still rhymes with net, even though it's spelled different, it sounds the same. However, that line still doesn't make much sense to me. I know what you're saying, but where's the diss? Nothing worthwhile.

[MC K]

I know wot ur sayin and I know I ave to present it better to get my meanin across...basically I was sayin from his name he got big tits and on his interests he doesnt have food written down so I was just jokin that he was fat from his name and I cicrcumcised his bits...not meaning his genitals lmao but I meant his lines. Thanks for the advice though. Oh and BigMann I dont mean anytin by the rhymes, just a battle.

[MC K]

Other links:
Link 2: http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?p=46312#post46312
Link 3: http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=3299