speedbump vs Tflamez (5-2)

[TfLaMeZ]

3 votes TKO, otherwise first to 5. No line limit, take as much time as you need


for the time being, i have to go, so i will post as soon as possbile(in about 2 and a half hours)( i have a sporting even to go to)

[speedbump]

No prob ... ill wait your spit i also have things to do.....

[TfLaMeZ]

you claimed this was suicide- you hit it right on the head/
cuz with one verse, and 20 words, your as good as dead//
rhymin ability difference streched out with so much in between/
i've seen your battles, they aren't strong, hard hitting or keen//
i said before its the effort that counts, but step it up, i wanna hear shouts/
no cryin in the corner, holding back or pouts//
one hundred and fifty percent of pure skill and rhyme talent/
make even the best on this site look the opposite of gallant//
cuz i'll rip you to shreds if you dont have the guts to step up/
i'll have you lost in translation, wandering and flat stuck//
you're a girl in mans world, and that's reality unfurled/
i'm not trying to mean, just playin my part in this world//

[speedbump]

You're wrong cause without doubt you're the one whose gonna shout after I win this bout/
All flamed out, when I punch you out, sprouting tears cause a girl got you knocked the f'out//

Mister,"I'm the best~on~this~site" thinks he's so good he could appear on the Conan Late~Show,~right?/
Not worth the rest~of~my~night, you're a little kid out of your league, even too small to date~Snow~White//

In school you must get lots of negation for fucking up that much the language of your nation//
I ain't the one lost in translation, your lost plain and simple like bagage at an airplane station/

Making fun of some battles of mine ain't worth a dime, it's like you trying to win with a few sexist lines/
To my reply you should've declined cause now you're as dead as those kid from Colorado's Columbine//

After this rhyme, my suicide thoughts leak into your head as if you were dying from peroxide/
Faking I was scared that's a good way to hide, but the obvious fact is I destroyed your pride//


Now vote please i kill my fucking brain off doing that .....

[Krine_Sixty-Nine]

Let's just start off with my vote goes to Tflamez.

In school you must get lots of negation for fucking up that much the language of your nation//

That doesn't make a whole lot of sense.

Making fun of some battles of mine ain't worth a dime, it's like you trying to win with a few sexist lines/
To my reply you should've declined cause now you're as dead as those kid from Colorado's Columbine//

Which lines were sexist?

I also didn't like your flow a whole lot. You've had much better than this and when you said you were lost in translation I looked at Tflamez thing and he said that. So you were sort of swiping his idea for a diss. Not your best battle Speedbump. Tflamez you had really good flow through out and was a really good one.

Vote - Tflamez

[madchild]

Alright, I'm going to break each verse down, bar by bar, since their short.

TFlamez

you claimed this was suicide- you hit it right on the head/
cuz with one verse, and 20 words, your as good as dead//

Good flow, but the concept is a little played out for an intro. Although it was a decent personal.

rhymin ability difference streched out with so much in between/
i've seen your battles, they aren't strong, hard hitting or keen//

First line was a little awkward. Are you trying to say her rhyming skills are thin and few? or there is so many others better? I'm not sure, but it wasn't really straight-forward. Not bad flow, but lacks a hard-hitting punch.

i said before its the effort that counts, but step it up, i wanna hear shouts/
no cryin in the corner, holding back or pouts//

Pretty weak structure for a bar, both lines vary in syllables by a large margin. It was a childish diss.

one hundred and fifty percent of pure skill and rhyme talent/
make even the best on this site look the opposite of gallant//

Didn't diss her. Just a filler bar, but then again, I have lots of these sometimes. I wasn't feeling what you were saying and it didn't catch me as too creative.

cuz i'll rip you to shreds if you dont have the guts to step up/
i'll have you lost in translation, wandering and flat stuck//

Step up and stuck rhymes? The lost in translation was a decent diss though and creative.

you're a girl in mans world, and that's reality unfurled/
i'm not trying to mean, just playin my part in this world//

The closer was probably your best bar, since it flowed well and I like how you rhymed "unfurl" with "in this world". Overall, you always have good flow and decent personals but lacked severely with punches and metaphors.

Speedbump:

I like your concept with your spit, countering him bar-for-bar just about. Very impressive for a newbie.

You're wrong cause without doubt you're the one whose gonna shout after I win this bout/
All flamed out, when I punch you out, sprouting tears cause a girl got you knocked the f'out//

I like the "All flamed out" part, playing off his name and implying the tears he be crying will put his fire the "F-out"! Nice, bold intro.

Mister,"I'm the best~on~this~site" thinks he's so good he could appear on the Conan Late~Show,~right?/
Not worth the rest~of~my~night, you're a little kid out of your league, even too small to date~Snow~White//

Good personal with his height (at least from his old pic he posted). Good use of multies and a diss.

In school you must get lots of negation for fucking up that much the language of your nation//
I ain't the one lost in translation, your lost plain and simple like bagage at an airplane station/

Good eye on picking up some of his grammatical faults. Good imagery
with the lost in translation.

Making fun of some battles of mine ain't worth a dime, it's like you trying to win with a few sexist lines/
To my reply you should've declined cause now you're as dead as those kid from Colorado's Columbine//

Not bad. The columbine thing is a little played out, but not bad rhyming wise.

After this rhyme, my suicide thoughts leak into your head as if you were dying from peroxide/
Faking I was scared that's a good way to hide, but the obvious fact is I destroyed your pride//

I like you're idea on the first line, how your choice of words painting the picture of thoughts leaking into your head like dying your hair with peroxide. As well, how you tied dying and suicide into the same line. Plus, you countered what he said with a pretty dope concept. Decent bar.

Just need to work a little hard on flow and punches.

I think Speedbump took this one.

[madchild]

Which lines were sexist?





you're a girl in mans world, and that's reality unfurled/
i'm not trying to mean, just playin my part in this world//



Tflamez last bar was sexist, saying that she's a girl in a man's world. This sorta implies that she shouldn't be battling, because this is a guy's role. He's saying this is how the world sees women, however, this isn't as bad now in two thousand and muthaf'in 4.



So you were sort of swiping his idea for a diss.


It's called countering or feeding, which wasn't specified in the battle terms, so it's allowed.

[speedbump]

Fuck it that was a d/r vote fucking hater.... oh i though i was almite... sorry :D ..... so 1-1

Need more votes..... Come On Peeps !! Please! We Need Votes!!!

[HipHopGenius]

my vote goes to speedbump

your a girl in a mans world and thats the reality unfurled
im not tryin to be mean just playin my part in this world

your best line tflames


but speedbumps line about fuckin up the language of your nation was line was great plus the comeback with the lost in translation line i think you underestimated her tflames

vote speedbump

[speedbump]

Well thx !

2-1 ..... more votes please.....

[AlMitE]

you claimed this was suicide- you hit it right on the head/
cuz with one verse, and 20 words, your as good as dead//
^very tight ^ that speaks for itself

rhymin ability difference streched out with so much in between/
i've seen your battles, they aren't strong, hard hitting or keen//
^not the best line u can come up with^ too many commas

i said before its the effort that counts, but step it up, i wanna hear shouts/
no cryin in the corner, holding back or pouts//
^great line^ i like how ur bringing that feel that u can almost picture her in the corner crying

one hundred and fifty percent of pure skill and rhyme talent/
make even the best on this site look the opposite of gallant//
^sweet^

cuz i'll rip you to shreds if you dont have the guts to step up/
i'll have you lost in translation, wandering and flat stuck//
^ i didnt like that line too much becausse of the vocab^ i had trouble with vocab but u only get better with practice.

you're a girl in mans world, and that's reality unfurled/
i'm not trying to mean, just playin my part in this world//
^good ending^ its basically showing hwos the boss in this battle, good line



vote=tflamez

[speedbump]

Hummm lol aright i wont say a damn word since it was decent.

2-2 more? please ?

[$tingeR]

not that you should listen to me cos almite says im a d/r lol but...

my vote goes to speedbump. i liked the snow white personal that was funny, though it kinda gave me disney imagery which isnt that good in a battle... but still a nice diss
the columbine is a bit played out, but as she is new to this she probably didnt know how much this was used?
anyway i generally thought speedbump was more complex with more of a variety of things on show there- wordplay, multies etc.

[speedbump]

Cool.... thanks Stigner.....

3-2 ....

Btw I didnt had the disney version in mind :rolleyes: lol
And actually its true i know a couple things that are really used (like dissing the mother lol )...but...not that much....

[speedbump]

come on people a couple more votes..... Please!

[bad news]

stinger get off almite's dick dawg. ur starting to d/r

[$tingeR]

WTF was that about??? i meant that faggot constantly accuses me of being a d/r... i said why listen to my vote in a sarcastic way. at least i gave some explanation...

[RipShit]

my vote goes to speedbump. her intro set the mood in the beginning for me, i could have given her the win after i read the first line. good verses for both of you though, no disrespect to you tflamez.

[speedbump]

Thank you ripshit .....
4-2
Please just a couples more..... comme on people!

[TfLaMeZ]

good battle so far, i give you props speedbumb, i royaly underestimated you! but you did awesome

[speedbump]

Well yeah i really wanted to do good...i pass lot but lot of time on that spit..... anyway thank you ....

[TfLaMeZ]

yeah no problem

[speedbump]

PLease Come on !! just a couple more... maybe just one .... PLEASE its not like it kill to vote!

[speedbump]

COME ON PEEPS !! PLEASE !!! It like one round and bout 10 lines each ya can read that and vote..... come on .....

[BigMann313]

well i liked both spit flamez and speedbump..i actually liked speedbumps more

but both good battle both of you

[speedbump]

Alright ...thanks bigmann ....

Ok batlle close.
Final score :
tflamez:2
Speed:5
Winner: Me! :clap:
Good battle Tflamez .....

[madchild]

CLOSED speedbump WINS 5-2.