$tingeR Vs Chappy

[$tingeR]

Rules:

1 ROUND

8 BARS (16 lines)

Deadline: 2moro night 10pm. Spit your verse asap bro.

Votes must be EXPLAINED. At the very least, favourite bars picked out and explained. Dont wanna waste a verse if it aint gonna be read properly and critiqued.

[chappy]

Aiight here's ma verse couldn't be arsed with 8 bars, it's past the deadline anywayz so just somethin' quick...

1) Stinger's back, but Stinger's wack, you ain't never DROPPIN' FRESH BRO, /
You got the dollar in ya name, but from lookin' at ya fashion sense I'd say u SHOP IN TESCO! /

2) I'ma big kid when it comes to this, I got ya arse quiverin' like ya NEED A SHIT, /
& your "poetry poison", that's why people die when they READ YA SPITS! /

3) My words are fire, I'ma HOT head, so my rhymes'll SCORCH YA AIR, /
U losin' this battle, but u can look on the 'bright' side, cuz u seem to have a TORCH TA BARE! /

4) My flow'll BLOW you away like I'm BRINGING IN GALES, /
This kid claims to be a scorpion, but there ain't no STING IN HIS TAIL! /
5) You're just weak son, I'm the heavyweight so I'll be SWINGING THE SCALES, /
Your battle record's poor, they're "shit digits" like u been FINGERING MALES! /

6) Nobody cheerin' ur rhymes bruv, only get "applauds" cuz he INFESTED WITH "CLAP", /
& you got ABBY in ya interests, but just face it, she just INTRESTED IN CHAP! / ;)


Explanations:

Bar 1 - He has a dollar sign ($) in his name, you can buy clothes from Tesco but they're shit & cheap!

Bar 2 - Self-exp... Posion kills.

Bar 3 - Self-exp, he has "torch to bare" in the lyrics in his sig. Torches are bright, look on the bright side.. get it?

Bar 4 - Self-exp...

Bar 5 - I'm sayin' his battle record's poor, so the amount of wins and losses are "shit digits". A digit can also mean a finger.

Bar 6 - Clap is slang for the STI Clamydia... fuck knowz how u spell it. And Clap as in applause u should get it.


WEAK.... If ya don't understand ma verse ya wack so don't bother voting.

SAFE Stinger, uppin ya verse nothin' personal :)

[$tingeR]

Yo, your verse was ok, but it would SEEM STINGERS ILLER
Im MILES AHEAD, hard to catch like the GREEN RIVER KILLER

I OOZE STYLE, you dress like you aint ever DROP A DOLLAR
This aint NINETEEN-EIGHTY son, so why the fuck you POP YA COLLAR!?

Im a necromancer, "KURUPT YA MIND" with an EVIL RAP FLOW
Im a veteran here boy, so just step down like FIDEL CASTRO

Damn straight i SPIT POISON, shit leaves YOU PARTIAL SIGHTED
cant keep a "TOON" so why you support NEWCASTLE UNITED?

Call you "C" cos you wont be HAPPY, im STRONG SMACKIN YA
NOTTINGHAMSHIRE is shit, I suggest you MOVE like JOHN AFRICA

call me mayweather, knockin six bells outta this RICK HATTON
your played GAY LINES are the fuckin reason i QUIT RAPPIN'

Those SCORPION jokes dont hurt, they dont even TINGLE MAN
This E-THUG aint POPPIN SHIT... not even a PRINGLE CAN

its like i used ROHIPNOL the way you just "HAD TO LOVE ME"
Im Clint Eastwood- "THE GOOD", this kid is just "BAD AND UGLY"







FOR THE IDIOTS:

(dont think anything NEEDS explaining, but if you arent sure...)

POP YA COLLAR refers to his pic, where he is wearing a suit with the collar flared out. This was fashionable in the 80s.

KURUPT YA MIND, he has kurupt mindz in his sig

NEWCASTLE UNITED nicknamed "THE TOON" he cant keep a rap tune...yeah

C...HAPPY yeah his name...

JOHN AFRICA err, u should know who he is, lead the MOVE organisation...hence MOVE

ROHIPNOL is a date rape drug. Last line refers to clint eastwood film the good the bad and the ugly



nice battle, lets get the votes in remember must be FULLY explained or broken into categories, with some analysis of bars.

[chappy]

Sick drop... I was like WTF at the Newcastle bar, I was like that shit don't rhyme! But then I realized ur southern & u don't say it the same as me lol.

& dude, I look the shit in that suit!

Uppin' votes, good battle..

SAFE.

[$tingeR]

What a waste of time, nobody can be bothered to vote. Everytime im on the forum there is between 20 and 50 people viewing this forum, but nobody ever posts.

[chappy]

^Innit... well this is how I see it.

You took this, by a hair. I reckon if I'da drop the full 8 bars it'd been a better battle. You had more metas, and my 2nd & 3rd bars were weak as fuck.

Decent battle, shame it was wasted.

I reckon if I'ma drop anymore lyrics I might just stick to the cyphers, least they ain't gonna get wasted lol.

[$tingeR]

Im gonna break it down myself just cos nobody else is. here goes...


1) Stinger's back, but Stinger's wack, you ain't never DROPPIN' FRESH BRO, /
You got the dollar in ya name, but from lookin' at ya fashion sense I'd say u SHOP IN TESCO! /

nice opener, nice multi, although dissing me on my fashion sense HAH;) :D

2) I'ma big kid when it comes to this, I got ya arse quiverin' like ya NEED A SHIT, /
& your "poetry poison", that's why people die when they READ YA SPITS! /

Yeah as you said this was pretty weak, although you included a personal. First line let it down really.

3) My words are fire, I'ma HOT head, so my rhymes'll SCORCH YA AIR, /
U losin' this battle, but u can look on the 'bright' side, cuz u seem to have a TORCH TA BARE! /

I actually liked this bar a lot. The first line was a little weak, but the 2nd line was a nice personal! could have done with taking a couple of words out of the 2nd line though as it is much longer than the 1st when u count syllables.

4) My flow'll BLOW you away like I'm BRINGING IN GALES, /
This kid claims to be a scorpion, but there ain't no STING IN HIS TAIL! /

Again a decent punch and personal, although a little generic

5) You're just weak son, I'm the heavyweight so I'll be SWINGING THE SCALES, /
Your battle record's poor, they're "shit digits" like u been FINGERING MALES! /

lol not bad, nice wordplay

6) Nobody cheerin' ur rhymes bruv, only get "applauds" cuz he INFESTED WITH "CLAP", /
& you got ABBY in ya interests, but just face it, she just INTRESTED IN CHAP! /

I actualy thought this was one of the weakest bars. Although you did your research and got the abby personal in there...i think you could have done something more creative with it. Plus i like to see the strongest bar at the end of the verse. All round this was a good verse, and when i read it i was thinking "oh shit, im gonna have to bring some tight game here!" mostly due to ure abundance of personals.


Yo, your verse was ok, but it would SEEM STINGERS ILLER
Im MILES AHEAD, hard to catch like the GREEN RIVER KILLER

Decent opener, reference to a notorious criminal...one of my favourite things in rap haha

I OOZE STYLE, you dress like you aint ever DROP A DOLLAR
This aint NINETEEN-EIGHTY son, so why the fuck you POP YA COLLAR!?

Not particularly strong but a good comeback to your fashion diss. As a side note, i also pop my collar;)

Im a necromancer, "KURUPT YA MIND" with an EVIL RAP FLOW
Im a veteran here boy, so just step down like FIDEL CASTRO

good vocab, personal, and another reference to an iconic figure, creative. Plus communists are funny.

Damn straight i SPIT POISON, shit leaves YOU PARTIAL SIGHTED
cant keep a "TOON" so why you support NEWCASTLE UNITED?

I forced the rhyme a little bit, but the 2nd bar is a very nice personal...how unfortunate for you that that is their nickname lol

Call you "C" cos you wont be HAPPY, im STRONG SMACKIN YA
NOTTINGHAMSHIRE is shit, I suggest you MOVE like JOHN AFRICA

half decent personals, but clever reference and wordplay on the AFRICA shit.

call me mayweather, knockin six bells outta this RICK HATTON
your played GAY LINES are the fuckin reason i QUIT RAPPIN'

Nice set up, slightly weak 2nd line, although grounded in reality as i DID quit rappin:D

Those SCORPION jokes dont hurt, they dont even TINGLE MAN
This E-THUG aint POPPIN SHIT... not even a PRINGLE CAN

lol pretty random decent wordplay and creativity tho

its like i used ROHIPNOL the way you just "HAD TO LOVE ME"
Im Clint Eastwood- "THE GOOD", this kid is just "BAD AND UGLY"

first line is good wordplay. 2nd line is the best line i have ever written. I just love it its fucking dope:p



As you said very close battle. Id take a guess that your the best on this site at the moment, as i dont remember coming up against anything this strong before.

[chappy]

Lmao you got that shit in your sig now haha, yeah I liked that bar too, but basically we both summed it up really - even if we did get votes, they'd be wack as fuck and pointless... you've only gotta look at my last battle to see what I mean. And yeah I probz am the best on site at moment, (bar you now obviously haha), but not much of an achievement when there's loadza wack heads on the site.

I need to start audio again man lol.

Good battle mate.. SAFE.

[YoBoyCue]

Consistency/Structure:both pretty consistent but i thought Stingers was easier to read
Creativity: both pretty creative, however stinger does have to take this
Enjoyable: final line on Stinger just made this too easy
Flow: Id suggest chappy just work a little on making it flow a tad bit better Stinger has this
Metaphors: if Chappy was gonna take any of them id prolly have to say this one is it
Multies: both had multies, im not a fan of emphasizing them with caps but its watever really
Personal:not much like direct personals, but prolly chappy
Punches: pretty even here
Vocabulary: Stinger definately
Wordplay: stinger
Overall: The voting makes this one seem like a blow out but its not, chappy still had a really good drop, just Stinger had you edged out on almost everything bro. Good battle tho

1-0 Stinger

[chappy]

Thanks for the vote, even if it's late... ^People tek note, that's how u vote.

[$tingeR]

yeah thanks for voting at last. Good job on doing it properly.