[Vacant Battle Leauge Championship] Champion Vs. ZenLand

[Rowe]

Check In: Friday, July 14th Midnight EST
Verses Due: Sunday, July 16th Midnight EST



3-5 Bars Max
(If your opponent checks in you must post some sort of verse for a win, if he doesn't check in, then you win by default.)

No: Recycling/Biting/Ghost Writing/Feeding Off Your Opponents Verse.

3-0 KO, 4-1 TKO, Or First To 5 Wins
No: Hate/Dick Riding/Unexplained Votes/Freeposting In Battles

If Theres Anyone You Dont Wish To Vote In Your Battle Clearly State The Name Of This Person And The Reasons Behind This

Crew votes if both battlers agree.

Acceptable Voting Methods:

(1) Bar-By-Bar Break Down.


(2) Catagories (With Full Explanations) That Must Include.

Punches:
Personals:
Multies:
Metas:
Flow:
Wordplay:
Creativity:
Nameplay:
Complexity:
Consistency:
Vocab:

Overall Vote:

Voting ends Tuesday after the due date.

Feel free to Pm Verses To Me or a.i.d.s

[ZenLand]

ccheck, i'll drop 3

[Champion]

Check, but why is the championship so soon?

Shouldn't the championship be of the winners of previous battles?

[Champion]

free92 or whatever his name is can't vote, because he DRs me.

[ZenLand]

I'ma Do A key

-My Spits Glow Tight, You Ill? She Thinks Cuz Itty Back Her She So Tight
Really? *Nope* Cuz Look At Her Profile (http://forum.eminem.net/member.php?u=13309), She Just A Silly Cracker With No Life
-Everything I Say Change Ya Brain Waves So Ya Don't Think The Same
So If Ya'll Were Wonderin, That's Why She Comes Here With A Fake Name
-I Suceed In Insane Spits, Ya Games Shit, I Bust Ya Head Till Ya Brain Split
We Know It, It's Been Exposed Ya Fake Like Explained David Blaine Tricks

Expo:
Bar 1: Click The Link
Bar 2: She Ain't A Champ So It's Fake
Bar 3: If David Blaine's Tricks Were Explained, He'd Be Fake

[Champion]

For you, there' no survival-in-what's-said, when you can't get revival-in-your-head 'cause like 'Virgina being incapable', from this board, you'll be VA can't/vacant like the title-of-this-thread...
'Slashin'-the-lines-of-others', fangs? You couldn't win a battle even though you grew-some/gruesome, 'holdin' a cape over your head' as you 'bashin'-minds-for-your-'cover', I already exposed you as a 'biter', so excuses, go get some new-ones (I caught him biting in our previous battle, and he had some excuse as to why he didn't bite; cover, excuse; slashing and stuff is gruesome)
Rappin' to be innocent, but get mad when your rhymes can bank-no-wins, 'cause when 'Zen' raps, it seems like he smoked an 'L and' drank-some-Jin/Gin, 'cause Snoop said so in-his-hit...!!! (Nameplay - ZenLand; Check profile - says some fave rappers are Jin, and the old Snoop Dogg)
I ain't put my rhymes-for-sale, but this 'Game' can still be gold, and I ain't gon' put my mind-on-'scales' 'cause we all know 'Middle Weight Champ' isn't the only thing you stole (he took the title from Falix; sayin' he steals lines, sayin' - for real and my witty lines, phat lines, middle weight; Game put out a diss to 50 Cent where he puts all his CDs for sale because he hates G-Unit)

[ArchimedeZ]

ZenLand

-My Spits Glow Tight, You Ill? She Thinks Cuz Itty Back Her She So Tight
Really? *Nope* Cuz Look At Her Profile, She Just A Silly Cracker With No Life
I didn’t like the “glow tight” part, that was forced. It made no sense. The rest of the bar was cool, second line was nice. Good opener.

-Everything I Say Change Ya Brain Waves So Ya Don't Think The Same
So If Ya'll Were Wonderin, That's Why She Comes Here With A Fake Name
I had to re-read this bar to see if the second line connected with the first, but it did. It still lacked something though, maybe the second line wasn’t worded correctly. It seemed to anti-climax, more of a jab.

-I Suceed In Insane Spits, Ya Games Shit, I Bust Ya Head Till Ya Brain Split
We Know It, It's Been Exposed Ya Fake Like Explained David Blaine Tricks
This was your best bar, I liked the direct horror core style shit in the first line and a nice punch in the second, could be a lil played though. Best bar, nice ender.

Overall: In your previous battles I have tended not to like your style as much but it was different in this battle, and I liked it. The second bar was the weakest of the three, but you prioritised (or you got lucky lol) and you had your best bars as your opener and ender. It was cool bro.

Champion

OK so this is 4 bars right? I couldn’t divide them for shit :confused:

For you, there' no survival-in-what's-said, when you can't get revival-in-your-head 'cause like 'Virgina being incapable', from this board, you'll be VA can't/vacant like the title-of-this-thread...
Hmmm no, I didn’t like this. It was weak, I don’t like punches that are too drawn out.

'Slashin'-the-lines-of-others', fangs? You couldn't win a battle even though you grew-some/gruesome, 'holdin' a cape over your head' as you 'bashin'-minds-for-your-'cover', I already exposed you as a 'biter', so excuses, go get some new-ones
First off get rid of the expo’s in the middle of bars, not good. The flow was fucked in this one, stops and starts here and everywhere. The concept was good, in theory, but it came out played.

Rappin' to be innocent, but get mad when your rhymes can bank-no-wins, 'cause when 'Zen' raps, it seems like he smoked an 'L and' drank-some-Jin/Gin, 'cause Snoop said so in-his-hit...!!!
Naww, this wasn’t nice. It started OK, but the Snoop part ruined it for me. This would be good if it was re-worded.

I ain't put my rhymes-for-sale, but this 'Game' can still be gold, and I ain't gon' put my mind-on-'scales' 'cause we all know 'Middle Weight Champ' isn't the only thing you stole
A shorter bar, and would you believe it, it’s your best. Direct and to the point, no beating around the bush. If all your bars were like this you would have stood a better chance.

Overall: Apart from your last, your bars were too long, stretched and drawn out. Punches had to be re-read and re-read in order to understand them, despite the expo’s in between the lines! Shorten down your bars and punch directly, I would sacrifice wordplay for direct punches imo.

Vote - ZenLand

If there's any complaints, get a more experienced vet to check my breakdown :cool:

[[Da~Iceman]]

Arch did a nice breakdown so i wont fully breakdown each bar...

Zen
-My Spits Glow Tight, You Ill? She Thinks Cuz Itty Back Her She So Tight
Really? *Nope* Cuz Look At Her Profile, She Just A Silly Cracker With No Life
nice personal/punch, glow tight was forced rest was nice
-Everything I Say Change Ya Brain Waves So Ya Don't Think The Same
So If Ya'll Were Wonderin, That's Why She Comes Here With A Fake Name
not bad, personal was tight, didnt seem to rhyme that well but it was nice imo...
-I Suceed In Insane Spits, Ya Games Shit, I Bust Ya Head Till Ya Brain Split
We Know It, It's Been Exposed Ya Fake Like Explained David Blaine Tricks
dope bar, nice punch and creativity...


For you, there' no survival-in-what's-said, when you can't get revival-in-your-head 'cause like 'Virgina being incapable', from this board, you'll be VA can't/vacant like the title-of-this-thread...
forced wordplay...not bad creativity tho...
'Slashin'-the-lines-of-others', fangs? You couldn't win a battle even though you grew-some/gruesome, 'holdin' a cape over your head' as you 'bashin'-minds-for-your-'cover', I already exposed you as a 'biter', so excuses, go get some new-ones
-I Leave Ya Beat And Bruised Till Ya Fuckin Brains Leak And Ooze
I Defeat This Fool, He Ain't Lazy No More, So When He Beat He Needs A New Excuse
need a new concept...shits played now...
Rappin' to be innocent, but get mad when your rhymes can bank-no-wins, 'cause when 'Zen' raps, it seems like he smoked an 'L and' drank-some-Jin/Gin, 'cause Snoop said so in-his-hit...!!!
the personal was there but the punch was off IMO
I ain't put my rhymes-for-sale, but this 'Game' can still be gold, and I ain't gon' put my mind-on-'scales' 'cause we all know 'Middle Weight Champ' isn't the only thing you stole
nice personal and punch...really only strong bar that im used to seeing from you...

Overall: Zenland for being more consistent...champ seemed off this battle...

[slimshadyLP]

ZenLand

-My Spits Glow Tight, You Ill? She Thinks Cuz Itty Back Her She So Tight
Really? *Nope* Cuz Look At Her Profile, She Just A Silly Cracker With No Life
Descent opener first part was a filler multies werent very special and second line i wasnt feelin wit its replayed "tite" rhyme second was descent punch

-Everything I Say Change Ya Brain Waves So Ya Don't Think The Same
So If Ya'll Were Wonderin, That's Why She Comes Here With A Fake Name
bar's flow was insteresting and slighlty stretched i didnt find nuttin very speical mulites were ok and punch coulda been alot harder. descent again. nuttin speicial

-I Suceed In Insane Spits, Ya Games Shit, I Bust Ya Head Till Ya Brain Split
We Know It, It's Been Exposed Ya Fake Like Explained David Blaine Tricks
flow slightly off multies ok descent for an ender ok metaphor.

Champion

For you, there' no survival-in-what's-said, when you can't get revival-in-your-head 'cause like 'Virgina being incapable', from this board, you'll be VA can't/vacant like the title-of-this-thread...
kool mutliez but wasnt feelin the wordplay/meta thougght it was sloppily done coulda been much better for a starter.

'Slashin'-the-lines-of-others', fangs? You couldn't win a battle even though you grew-some/gruesome, 'holdin' a cape over your head' as you 'bashin'-minds-for-your-'cover', I already exposed you as a 'biter', so excuses, go get some new-ones
nice multies and nice wordplay here i liked it and the ender personal was nice too good bar. nice multiez too

Rappin' to be innocent, but get mad when your rhymes can bank-no-wins, 'cause when 'Zen' raps, it seems like he smoked an 'L and' drank-some-Jin/Gin, 'cause Snoop said so in-his-hit...!!!
wasnt feelin this bar at all attempted personal but i thought it was dun sloppy cudda been improved alot more multies were ok.

I ain't put my rhymes-for-sale, but this 'Game' can still be gold, and I ain't gon' put my mind-on-'scales' 'cause we all know 'Middle Weight Champ' isn't the only thing you stole
good flow multies were ok cudda been more complex wordplay was koo on here descnet ender.


Punches: Z
Personals: Z
Multies: C
Metas: C
Flow: Z
Wordplay: C
Creativity: tie
Consistency/Structure: Z
Vocab: /
Overall: Zenland, seen way better from champ.

[a.i.d.s.]

3:0 zenland. which means zenland is the BL-Champ.