Airjordan23 Vs. Rowe (4-0 KO)

[Minus 17]

lets go, i lets you begin

[Rowe]

airjordan23's the new kid on the block runnin up to every "vet" tryin to suck their cock
it aint gunna rub wiv me little punk you got on this forum and as soon as you did your whole life sunk cus you met me the r.o.w.e

you must have brain damage kid if you think you look like em ha ha iv had shits that look like em compared to you, you aint nothing kid just crawl back under that rock that you escaped from and get in bed il call the doc for your dammaged head

[Minus 17]

yo

I thinks its your brain who damaged becuz when i see your lyrics I know that your mother got fingered. Now listen to me, your rap is crap, you aint nothin like a rapper , maybe u sell drugs, your a white dopper, anyway , ur shit maybe come true one day, but dont forgive that all this time, you will be on my way

[Minus 17]

done, both of us got well battle,

now people

who do u think is gotta be winning?

[ArchimedeZ]

shit, you battle too quickly man, you gotta elevate hella lot first:

1 - your structure was way fucked up

---------------------rhyme/
---------------------rhyme//

this is a multie and should be used to begin with

2 - some of it didnt even rhyme, man this is a battle not a playground
3 - try droppin some open mics first and gettin some feedback before you battle
4 - spend some time, the quicker you write it doesnt make you a better rapper, it just makes it look rushed an childish

ok, may sound a little harsh but i gotta tell it like it is

VOTE - airjordan23, the better of a pair of bad apples

i aint gonna break it down cus i just did for both above

[ArcheType]

yeah listen to ElectricalXcess..
he dont wana put ya off, he just given sum good advice out there fo ya...
(Gud advice it was!)
Dont rush ya writtin, esp if new (like me!), take time to think of somethin witty n not a diss/punch that bin played out loadsa times otherwise its just like...ya ma this...he did that ya ma....etc...(im just getin outa this thou)

Elevate vocab, make it rhyme n flow usin, a structure etc..

Tha battle was wack...but keep at it n youll improve vastly...Keep at it

Overall: errrr.... airjordan23

Peace....1.....

[S.W.A.T]

rass, ima hvae to go wit them Air got this...

[Executioner]

same, i think Air won it.