BL Day 3: Killa Jones vs Demise (1:4)

[a.i.d.s.]

rules:

4 - 8 bars
deadline friday
no biting
no feeding
no recycling

votes:

bar by bar votes or category with explaination
only people who are signed in the BL are allowed to vote



don't forget your links

[Demise]

Checkin in... this should be a decent battle

[Killa Jones]

I leave this mc with bigger headaches than tumour patients
My lyrics eat at the brain like a drill to the pavements

Ill murder you in a bar, ill Joe Pesci you, in your neck
A pen for the hole and lyrics and the blood rush is for respect

Y’all kats running scared ~like pussies~ with their tale in the air
Hair standing in pairs ~no pushies~ His rap was unprepared

I came in the ring with a spit so wild, lyrics so vile and my flows hostile
Demise aint even worthwhile especially when he battling with sum1 else’s style

There’s a disguise with demise, I advise you with cries
He supplies lines and lies from other mc’s so I despise

The force of my presence is like a horse in all weathers
While you punch into your pillow –and the cause- just four feathers

Out dated and out favoured, by this true lyrical player
Now to slay ya and watch you bleed, while you didn’t even scratch a layer

The professor of the league coz Im mean and smoke green
You a teen who unseen and now u served like a cuisine



1. Drilling pavements causes headaches like tumour patients
2. Joe Pesci kills that guy in a bar with a pen
3. I don’t have to push him coz he already scared
4. Saying he steals styles
5. Biter
6. Saying his punches are pussy
7. Saying he didn’t touch me n he outplayed
8. Served the kid

[Demise]

Man you was born dead*(1) I’m just fillin in ya grave/
Class is in session sit down shut up and behave*(2)//

Im spittin twice the flamez as T*(3) I’m blazin past/
You’s a fag people exploding*(4) in ya naked ass*(5)//

You aint on my level step down I cant see you/
I’m “Dane~Jeruz”*(6), I “Ghostwrite”*(7) for people who beat you//

Ya shit aint worth my time nobody feel ya flows/
PM'n me to drop love losin thats what I call a Killa Jones//(Jones is an obsession btw)

Man skill don’t come wit age*(8) cuz Im bout to win
A prodigy*(9) that don’t gta be almite*(10) to win/

Explanations
1: Profile says born killer… switched it up a lil
2: Hes a student… you should get that
3: Lost to T-Flamez twice
4: his sig has the plane from lost exploding
5: His screen name is nakedboy_uk_182
6: Dane~Jeruz beat his… and Im to understand that the name is pronounced dangerous
7: Ghostwriter beat him
8: He’s 19 and Im sayin I’ll win
9: Child prodigy beat him and Im way younger than him
10: Almite’s some1 he beat so if I aint almite I could win… u dn’t get tht youre whack as fuck



Good verse man I'll drop links a lil later

[Falix]

I leave this mc with bigger headaches than tumour patients
My lyrics eat at the brain like a drill to the pavements
^^ok opener, shoulda been harder

Ill murder you in a bar, ill Joe Pesci you, in your neck
A pen for the hole and lyrics and the blood rush is for respect
^^lol liked the second line

Y’all kats running scared ~like pussies~ with their tale in the air
Hair standing in pairs ~no pushies~ His rap was unprepared
^^ehh. dont see why u said "ya'll cats" when ur battling one person...

I came in the ring with a spit so wild, lyrics so vile and my flows hostile
Demise aint even worthwhile especially when he battling with sum1 else’s style^^Lmao nice, this was good, no flaw in this bar at all

There’s a disguise with demise, I advise you with cries
He supplies lines and lies from other mc’s so I despise
^^decent bar,

The force of my presence is like a horse in all weathers
While you punch into your pillow –and the cause- just four feathers
^^nice

Out dated and out favoured, by this true lyrical player
Now to slay ya and watch you bleed, while you didn’t even scratch a layer
^^didnt like this much, prob weakest bar

The professor of the league coz Im mean and smoke green
You a teen who unseen and now u served like a cuisine
^^ok closer, shoulda been harder

overall nice verse, good shit, funny punches









Man you was born dead*(1) I’m just fillin in ya grave/
Class is in session sit down shut up and behave*(2)//
^^Nice opener

Im spittin twice the flamez as T*(3) I’m blazin past/
You’s a fag people exploding*(4) in ya naked ass*(5)//
^^nice personal on T Flamez, plane, and profile

You aint on my level step down I cant see you/
I’m “Dane~Jeruz”*(6), I “Ghostwrite”*(7) for people who beat you//
^^lol nice, good shit

Ya shit aint worth my time nobody feel ya flows/
PM'n me to drop love losin thats what I call a Killa Jones//(Jones is an obsession btw)
^^this ok ok, kinda weak

Man skill don’t come wit age*(8) cuz Im bout to win
A prodigy*(9) that don’t gta be almite*(10) to win/
^^also weak...

overall i jus liked ur first three bars... last 2 were kinda weak

Sorry Demise. think that Killa got this...

[Demise]

aight cool

[Demise]

Still uppin vote its 1-0 Killa

[D-ManD]

Killa Jones

I leave this mc with bigger headaches than tumour patients
My lyrics eat at the brain like a drill to the pavements
Avg coulda hit harder tho

Ill murder you in a bar, ill Joe Pesci you, in your neck
A pen for the hole and lyrics and the blood rush is for respect
Good meta good bar

Y’all kats running scared ~like pussies~ with their tale in the air
Hair standing in pairs ~no pushies~ His rap was unprepared
Agree wit alix only one guy but the bar was nda weak neway

I came in the ring with a spit so wild, lyrics so vile and my flows hostile
Demise aint even worthwhile especially when he battling with sum1 else’s style
Good shit man good shit

There’s a disguise with demise, I advise you with cries
He supplies lines and lies from other mc’s so I despise
Avg

The force of my presence is like a horse in all weathers
While you punch into your pillow –and the cause- just four feathers
Good one

Out dated and out favoured, by this true lyrical player
Now to slay ya and watch you bleed, while you didn’t even scratch a layer
This was weak

The professor of the league coz Im mean and smoke green
You a teen who unseen and now u served like a cuisine
Not feelin this one

Overall good verse no personals tho

Demise

Man you was born dead*(1) I’m just fillin in ya grave/
Class is in session sit down shut up and behave*(2)//
Tight opener

Im spittin twice the flamez as T*(3) I’m blazin past/
You’s a fag people exploding*(4) in ya naked ass*(5)//
Damn triple diss good shit

You aint on my level step down I cant see you/
I’m “Dane~Jeruz”*(6), I “Ghostwrite”*(7) for people who beat you//
Damn you killin em

Ya shit aint worth my time nobody feel ya flows/
PM'n me to drop love losin thats what I call a Killa Jones//(Jones is an obsession btw)
Meh that killed ya run this bar is avg

Man skill don’t come wit age*(8) cuz Im bout to win
A prodigy*(9) that don’t gta be almite*(10) to win/
Avg closer I expect better from you

This was a really good battle I think. Jones had more bars but Demise's 1st 3 bars were in the top 4 of the battle. I dno I think pound for pound Demise took this good ass battle peoples.

[mattSMD]

Killa
I leave this mc with bigger headaches than tumour patients
My lyrics eat at the brain like a drill to the pavements
ok
Ill murder you in a bar, ill Joe Pesci you, in your neck
A pen for the hole and lyrics and the blood rush is for respect
not feelin it
Y’all kats running scared ~like pussies~ with their tale in the air
Hair standing in pairs ~no pushies~ His rap was unprepared
average
I came in the ring with a spit so wild, lyrics so vile and my flows hostile
Demise aint even worthwhile especially when he battling with sum1 else’s style
not bad
There’s a disguise with demise, I advise you with cries
He supplies lines and lies from other mc’s so I despise
forced
The force of my presence is like a horse in all weathers
While you punch into your pillow –and the cause- just four feathers
ok
Out dated and out favoured, by this true lyrical player
Now to slay ya and watch you bleed, while you didn’t even scratch a layer
aight
The professor of the league coz Im mean and smoke green
You a teen who unseen and now u served like a cuisine
average spit, no better, no worse
Demise
Man you was born dead*(1) I’m just fillin in ya grave/
Class is in session sit down shut up and behave*(2)//
ok but not an opener
Im spittin twice the flamez as T*(3) I’m blazin past/
You’s a fag people exploding*(4) in ya naked ass*(5)//
ok
You aint on my level step down I cant see you/
I’m “Dane~Jeruz”*(6), I “Ghostwrite”*(7) for people who beat you//
weak rhyme but good overall bar
Ya shit aint worth my time nobody feel ya flows/
PM'n me to drop love losin thats what I call a Killa Jones//(Jones is an obsession btw)
ok
Man skill don’t come wit age*(8) cuz Im bout to win
A prodigy*(9) that don’t gta be almite*(10) to win/
relative to site but not really a personal

demise just about took it, if killa lessened his bars and improved one or two you'da won this

[Demise]

Aight thnx fo tha votes people matt appreciate the breakdown D-ManD thnx fo the vote... thats 2-1 me UPPIN

[chappy]

KILLA JONES:

I leave this mc with bigger headaches than tumour patients
My lyrics eat at the brain like a drill to the pavements

^^Nice meta, but no punch/personal..

Ill murder you in a bar, ill Joe Pesci you, in your neck
A pen for the hole and lyrics and the blood rush is for respect

^^Good shit, need to come harder though

Y’all kats running scared ~like pussies~ with their tale in the air
Hair standing in pairs ~no pushies~ His rap was unprepared

^^Better

I came in the ring with a spit so wild, lyrics so vile and my flows hostile
Demise aint even worthwhile especially when he battling with sum1 else’s style

^^OK

There’s a disguise with demise, I advise you with cries
He supplies lines and lies from other mc’s so I despise

^^Aight

The force of my presence is like a horse in all weathers
While you punch into your pillow –and the cause- just four feathers

^^Nah didn't like this bar

Out dated and out favoured, by this true lyrical player
Now to slay ya and watch you bleed, while you didn’t even scratch a layer

^^No punch

The professor of the league coz Im mean and smoke green
You a teen who unseen and now u served like a cuisine

^^Better, but you still need to come harder..


DEMISE:

Man you was born dead*(1) I’m just fillin in ya grave/
Class is in session sit down shut up and behave*(2)//

^^Aight play on the born killa shit, but apart from that weak...

Im spittin twice the flamez as T*(3) I’m blazin past/
You’s a fag people exploding*(4) in ya naked ass*(5)//

^^Liked this bar, funny

You aint on my level step down I cant see you/
I’m “Dane~Jeruz”*(6), I “Ghostwrite”*(7) for people who beat you//

^^Nice

Ya shit aint worth my time nobody feel ya flows/
PM'n me to drop love losin thats what I call a Killa Jones//

^^Nah, weak

Man skill don’t come wit age*(8) cuz Im bout to win
A prodigy*(9) that don’t gta be almite*(10) to win/

^^Aight


Killa - It's good shit don't get me wrong, but it's text battling, you need to come harder, it's like you spittin on the mic.
Demise - Quite liked this actually even though it was simple, punches/personals were decent and I felt ya flow.

Vote - Demise scraped this, if you'd have done more you would have secured a better win, sorry Killa.

1.

[Demise]

Damn man thnx fo the breakdown that 3-1 me. Is this a win?

if not UPPIN

[slimshadyLP]

KILLA JONES:

I leave this mc with bigger headaches than tumour patients
My lyrics eat at the brain like a drill to the pavements

nuttin special,ok metaphor,ok opener

Ill murder you in a bar, ill Joe Pesci you, in your neck
A pen for the hole and lyrics and the blood rush is for respect

i didint like this at all..bad meta..and punch

Y’all kats running scared ~like pussies~ with their tale in the air
Hair standing in pairs ~no pushies~ His rap was unprepared

nuttin speaical again, pretty simple,

I came in the ring with a spit so wild, lyrics so vile and my flows hostile
Demise aint even worthwhile especially when he battling with sum1 else’s style

multies were ok a lil forced....i liked the second line....

There’s a disguise with demise, I advise you with cries
He supplies lines and lies from other mc’s so I despise

no real pucnh at all..........

The force of my presence is like a horse in all weathers
While you punch into your pillow –and the cause- just four feathers

???

Out dated and out favoured, by this true lyrical player
Now to slay ya and watch you bleed, while you didn’t even scratch a layer

no punch......

The professor of the league coz Im mean and smoke green
You a teen who unseen and now u served like a cuisine

pretty weak...multies ok...weak ender...

DEMISE:

Man you was born dead*(1) I’m just fillin in ya grave/
Class is in session sit down shut up and behave*(2)//

pretty weak opener..perosnal wanst so peacial either...

Im spittin twice the flamez as T*(3) I’m blazin past/
You’s a fag people exploding*(4) in ya naked ass*(5)//

ok line.......

You aint on my level step down I cant see you/
I’m “Dane~Jeruz”*(6), I “Ghostwrite”*(7) for people who beat you//

didint like this punch....

Ya shit aint worth my time nobody feel ya flows/
PM'n me to drop love losin thats what I call a Killa Jones//

weak..........

Man skill don’t come wit age*(8) cuz Im bout to win
A prodigy*(9) that don’t gta be almite*(10) to win/

ehhhh

Consistency/Structure: tie
Creativity: K
Enjoyable: tie
Flow: tie
Metaphors: D (better)
Multies: K
Personal: D
Punches: D
Vocabulary: none
Wordplay: D
Overall: Demise wins.......

[Demise]

aight then thats 3-1 me...

UPPIN

[Killa Jones]

good battle demise

[Demise]

Yea man propz to you.... Is this a win now or is it to 5 or what?

[Killa Jones]

bro u win

well done u got 3 out of 3, on a roll

[Demise]

Aight man thnx good battle

-*CLOSED*-

[Dash]

Just a comment.. i was gonna vote for killa.. what happened demise?.. u keystyle that or somthin?.. wasnt at your best.. meh.. don` matta good battle guys..

dash

[CapZ]

KILLA JONES Verse:

I leave this mc with bigger headaches than tumour patients
My lyrics eat at the brain like a drill to the pavements
`` so-so 3/5 opener not bad``

Ill murder you in a bar, ill Joe Pesci you, in your neck
A pen for the hole and lyrics and the blood rush is for respect
`` ok``

Y’all kats running scared ~like pussies~ with their tale in the air
Hair standing in pairs ~no pushies~ His rap was unprepared
`` FORCED MULTIE.. Ight punch tho at da last``

I came in the ring with a spit so wild, lyrics so vile and my flows hostile
Demise aint even worthwhile especially when he battling with sum1 else’s style
``ight..``

There’s a disguise with demise, I advise you with cries
He supplies lines and lies from other mc’s so I despise
`` ehhh WHERES DA PUNCH``

The force of my presence is like a horse in all weathers
While you punch into your pillow –and the cause- just four feathers
`` ight``

Out dated and out favoured, by this true lyrical player
Now to slay ya and watch you bleed, while you didn’t even scratch a layer
`` so-so``

The professor of the league coz Im mean and smoke green
You a teen who unseen and now u served like a cuisine
`` mmm.. could've been betta not a HARD CLOSER 1/5``


DEMISE:

Man you was born dead*(1) I’m just fillin in ya grave/
Class is in session sit down shut up and behave*(2)//
``OK kinda funny 2/5 opener``

Im spittin twice the flamez as T*(3) I’m blazin past/
You’s a fag people exploding*(4) in ya naked ass*(5)//
`` Good lol``

You aint on my level step down I cant see you/
I’m “Dane~Jeruz”*(6), I “Ghostwrite”*(7) for people who beat you//
`` PERSONAL Good``

Ya shit aint worth my time nobody feel ya flows/
PM'n me to drop love losin thats what I call a Killa Jones//
`` ehhh see That's FORCED Multies homie``

Man skill don’t come wit age*(8) cuz Im bout to win
A prodigy*(9) that don’t gta be almite*(10) to win/
`` Ehhh Forced a lil... 1/5 Closer``


PUNCHES- D.. Funny
PERSONALS- D.. Kill u need to work on that homie
MULTIES- D.. EZ Tho Some FORCED
METAS- Killa
VOCAB- Killa
FLOW/STRUCTURE- TIE
CREATIVE- KILLA
ENJOYED- D

OVERALL-Kinda Close but Demise took this[Seen betta from u tho homie].. just cuz he had betta punches and atleast some Personals.. Killa it seem u just Key'd that.. i wanted them Personals u know.. Ight ya

`1`

[Killa Jones]

i thought this battle was over on sunday lol, yeh i always keystle my text shit, fuck takin my time and that!

[a.i.d.s.]

4:1 Demise