Toxic vs Lyrikhal (3:0)

[a.i.d.s.]

rules:

4 - 8 bars (real bars, means !!!!!!TWO!!!!!! lines)
time limit friday
no biting
no feeding
no recycling

votes:

bar by bar votes only
only people who are signed in the BL are allowed two vote



don't forget your links (to battles in the BL), you can post them afterwards this time, if you don't till friday : DQ!


Good Luck:

start

[LyRiKhAl]

Impatient am waiting for you to laiden my vital stats polluted//1
Healthy rating, am satan but you hit me with a style thats diluted//2

Mr.Nuclear warfare extorts your flaws and forces you to withdraw//
I am the law, sentencing you to death but first heres the tour//3

i introduce you to carnal abuse and leave ure face pasted like tomato juice//
New news your jaws come loose let me tie it up like a SU and NATO truce//4

second part your ribcages part reach through and i restart your heart//5
The scenes like some graphic art followed by lethal insition with a dart//

Almost dead? but were only at halfway Wake up your startin to decay//6
like your style when it eroded and left nuthin to display//7

A malicous act this devilish pact left you backed with no way to react//
To be exact your no longer intact your so random your considered abstract//8

Forsaking am leavin your ass aching on the pavement for the taking//
But dont worry son this was only a nightmare except you aint ever waking//9

k lol i got a bit carried away with the theme here and just kept going and didnt realise till i finished but ah well.

explanation:
1.-hes toxic and when someone is poisoned etc their vital stats go down
2.-when somethings diluted its alot weaker and watered down
3.-this verse is the tour to death
4.- nato and the soviet union were opposing factions during the cold war
5.-heart is behind your ribcage
6.-halfway threw the tour and halfway threw the verse wich is the tour if u know wot i mean
7.-when summit erodes it slowly dissapears
8.- in alot of forms of media when someone produces summit dead shit or random and not to the point they sometimes suggest its abstract so it sounds better.
9.-this is a nightmare but he will be in it forever and never wake up

ok toxic your up m8

[Toxic]

iight my bad...i aint know bout it.

nervous for my verse u ready to shout-scared /
cause im milkin this win so bad i got that I cows-scared /1

my one eyes erect, so beatin ya will be "hard-to-watch" /
with long song titles ya skillz still wouldnt be off-the-charts /2

put ya name in ya ass and ya still wouldnt explode as u start-to-fart /
and ya heart-departs, ya minds skiddin out of control wit no smart-remarks /3

ya cant be aroused-to-win, by the sound-of-it, cause im sawin-ya-horns /
full frontal, class makin fun of u now, like its back to the drawings-boards /4

u winnin-this-bout? submittin-ya-proud work? bitch, chances-are-lottery /
look closely, watchin Vote-T, in hopes, ass kicked, enhances-the-sodomy /5


some quick shyt.

uppin...nice verse homie

[slimshadyLP]

Lyrihkal

Impatient am waiting for you to laiden my vital stats polluted//1
Healthy rating, am satan but you hit me with a style thats diluted//2
meh personal...no real punch...weak as a opener...

Mr.Nuclear warfare extorts your flaws and forces you to withdraw//
I am the law, sentencing you to death but first heres the tour//3
weak...no real punch...just fillers...

i introduce you to carnal abuse and leave ure face pasted like tomato juice//
New news your jaws come loose let me tie it up like a SU and NATO truce//4
iight this is cool....

second part your ribcages part reach through and i restart your heart//5
The scenes like some graphic art followed by lethal insition with a dart//
filler....no real punch...cool multies though...

Almost dead? but were only at halfway Wake up your startin to decay//6
like your style when it eroded and left nuthin to display//7
meh personal and punch....pretty weak overall

A malicous act this devilish pact left you backed with no way to react//
To be exact your no longer intact your so random your considered abstract//8
no real punch again.....

Forsaking am leavin your ass aching on the pavement for the taking//
But dont worry son this was only a nightmare except you aint ever waking//9
weak ass ender and punch...worst bar.....

damn lyrikhal was that a diss or a verse for a song? u need more punchlines...

Toxic

nervous for my verse u ready to shout-scared /
cause im milkin this win so bad i got that I cows-scared /1
average opener nuttin speacil...

my one eyes erect, so beatin ya will be "hard-to-watch" /
with long song titles ya skillz still wouldnt be off-the-charts /2
DAMN that that second line was tight....

put ya name in ya ass and ya still wouldnt explode as u start-to-fart /
and ya heart-departs, ya minds skiddin out of control wit no smart-remarks /3
filler....no real punch

ya cant be aroused-to-win, by the sound-of-it, cause im sawin-ya-horns /
full frontal, class makin fun of u now, like its back to the drawings-boards /4
ehh its ok.....

u winnin-this-bout? submittin-ya-proud work? bitch, chances-are-lottery /
look closely, watchin Vote-T, in hopes, ass kicked, enhances-the-sodomy /5
descent ender..

Consistency/Structure: tie
Creativity: tie
Enjoyable: T
Flow: L
Metaphors: T
Multies: L
Personal: none really stood out
Punches: T
Vocabulary: L
Wordplay: T
Overall: toxic won...coulda been a better battle though........

[Tyrone]

LyRiKhAl

Impatient am waiting for you to laiden my vital stats polluted//1
Healthy rating, am satan but you hit me with a style thats diluted/
good opener, nuthin special

Mr.Nuclear warfare extorts your flaws and forces you to withdraw//
I am the law, sentencing you to death but first heres the tour//3
avg bar

i introduce you to carnal abuse and leave ure face pasted like tomato juice//
New news your jaws come loose let me tie it up like a SU and NATO truce//4
decent bar

second part your ribcages part reach through and i restart your heart//5
The scenes like some graphic art followed by lethal insition with a dart//
...no punch rlly

Almost dead? but were only at halfway Wake up your startin to decay//6
like your style when it eroded and left nuthin to display//7
weak bar

A malicous act this devilish pact left you backed with no way to react//
To be exact your no longer intact your so random your considered abstract//8
good multies

Forsaking am leavin your ass aching on the pavement for the taking//
But dont worry son this was only a nightmare except you aint ever waking//9
desent ender

it was nice, but you didnt have a lot of good punches...I mean its a battle

Toxic

nervous for my verse u ready to shout-scared /
cause im milkin this win so bad i got that I cows-scared /1
avg opener

my one eyes erect, so beatin ya will be "hard-to-watch" /
with long song titles ya skillz still wouldnt be off-the-charts /2
nice bar

put ya name in ya ass and ya still wouldnt explode as u start-to-fart /
and ya heart-departs, ya minds skiddin out of control wit no smart-remarks /3
lol nice bar, good multies

ya cant be aroused-to-win, by the sound-of-it, cause im sawin-ya-horns /
full frontal, class makin fun of u now, like its back to the drawings-boards /4
nice again

u winnin-this-bout? submittin-ya-proud work? bitch, chances-are-lottery /
look closely, watchin Vote-T, in hopes, ass kicked, enhances-the-sodomy /5
nice ender

nice verse Toxic


my vote goes to Toxic

[Killa Jones]

LyRiKhAl

Impatient am waiting for you to laiden my vital stats polluted//1
Healthy rating, am satan but you hit me with a style thats diluted/
Ok opener

Mr.Nuclear warfare extorts your flaws and forces you to withdraw//
I am the law, sentencing you to death but first heres the tour//3
ok bar
i introduce you to carnal abuse and leave ure face pasted like tomato juice//
New news your jaws come loose let me tie it up like a SU and NATO truce//4
not bad bar

second part your ribcages part reach through and i restart your heart//5
The scenes like some graphic art followed by lethal insition with a dart//
not feelin it

Almost dead? but were only at halfway Wake up your startin to decay//6
like your style when it eroded and left nuthin to display//7
nah

A malicous act this devilish pact left you backed with no way to react//
To be exact your no longer intact your so random your considered abstract//8
good bar

Forsaking am leavin your ass aching on the pavement for the taking//
But dont worry son this was only a nightmare except you aint ever waking//9
ok closer



Toxic

nervous for my verse u ready to shout-scared /
cause im milkin this win so bad i got that I cows-scared /1
ok opener

my one eyes erect, so beatin ya will be "hard-to-watch" /
with long song titles ya skillz still wouldnt be off-the-charts /2
nice bar

put ya name in ya ass and ya still wouldnt explode as u start-to-fart /
and ya heart-departs, ya minds skiddin out of control wit no smart-remarks /3
nice bar

ya cant be aroused-to-win, by the sound-of-it, cause im sawin-ya-horns /
full frontal, class makin fun of u now, like its back to the drawings-boards /4
decent bar

u winnin-this-bout? submittin-ya-proud work? bitch, chances-are-lottery /
look closely, watchin Vote-T, in hopes, ass kicked, enhances-the-sodomy /5
nice closer



\Toxic came harder with the punches
Vote: Toxic

[a.i.d.s.]

3 : 0 Toxic


congratulations

Toxic: +3
Lyrikhal: -3