BL Day 1: mattSMD vs Tyrone (3:0)

[a.i.d.s.]

rules:

4 - 8 bars (real bars, means !!!!!!TWO!!!!!! lines)
time limit friday
no biting
no feeding
no recycling

votes:

bar by bar votes only
only people who are signed in the BL are allowed two vote



don't forget your links (to battles in the BL), you can post them afterwards this time, if you don't till friday : DQ!


Good Luck:

start

[mattSMD]

http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?p=184240#post184240
http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?p=184390#post184390

This shit aint even started but I'm already on the throne
Your crew might realise you're wack after this battle then Tyrone's left all alone/1
I like to spend my spare time writing lyrics and trying to create beats
Whereas this fat bastard worries about dogs dribblin on stolen car seats/2
The game don't change people, it only affects those of us who's weak
You need to toughen up, geek, if you don't your future's lookin bleak/3
Hop off my nuts because to me you aint ever gonna be a worthy match
Women tell me that I'm the Brad Pitt, and you're the fat cunt out of "Snatch"/4
You damn right in your signature, to win you gotta LOOSEN up like this
Instead of loosening your shit box with your finger everytime you take a piss/5
You aint even got a clue of what I could do to you?
Let me tell ya, I'll piss all over your wack fucking crew/6
I'll kill you with my skill, i'll be spittin while you just cough it
I ain't mad though, all the time you suck at this i'll be makin myself a prophet/7 (profit)
Call me Nas cos "you wanna be me", fuck it i'm a dude so call me Devin (pronounced Devon)
And fuck hurricane Katrina, your mum'n' dad created the world's worst natural disaster in nineteen-eighty-seven/8

1. Thought chess would have more sense
2. Watch Tyrone in "Snatch"
3. Check his Jada quote in his sig
4. Watch the film
5. Mis-spelt lose in his sig
6. Just a punch
7. Check his crew name
8. (Check bio) he was born in 1987

[Tyrone]

Im doppin tomorrow mornin

[Tyrone]

I knew you would be crap, bitch I wasent wrong-cuz/
I was never on your stink ass dick, but your mom-was/

my future aint important, dawg but yours-is/
ask Makaveli to show you how to do a chorus/

you claim to be on da throne, but the seat-is-takin/
with all those beefs, you act tuff, but to me-you-fakin/

man this heat-Im-makin, you will never come close to-me/
this beef-you-creatin, you gettin merk by a so called newbie/

man youre a groupie, probly wanna know bout Em's pets-n-house/
last night your sis told me you were gay, mothafucka gotta accept-it-now/

man I respect-this-clown, like I respect Da-Dick-Takuh/
winnin against this mothafucka is nuthin but another Deja-Vu/

you hard as iron, but after this you might-be-melted/
check youself, boy make sure youre tightly-belted/

[Tyrone]

http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=14929
http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=14936&page=2

Uppin Votes!!!

[LyRiKhAl]

Matt:

This shit aint even started but I'm already on the throne
Your crew might realise you're wack after this battle then Tyrone's left all alone/1
Nuthin special and you lost flow in 2nd part

I like to spend my spare time writing lyrics and trying to create beats
Whereas this fat bastard worries about dogs dribblin on stolen car seats/2

Nice bar overall but average rhymes

The game don't change people, it only affects those of us who's weak
You need to toughen up, geek, if you don't your future's lookin bleak/3

Didnt like this rhymes were weak and its pretty played

Hop off my nuts because to me you aint ever gonna be a worthy match
Women tell me that I'm the Brad Pitt, and you're the fat cunt out of "Snatch"/4

lol flow was off but was a funny bar i liked this

You damn right in your signature, to win you gotta LOOSEN up like this
Instead of loosening your shit box with your finger everytime you take a piss/5

nice theme but cudda worked on the rhymes a bit more

You aint even got a clue of what I could do to you?
Let me tell ya, I'll piss all over your wack fucking crew/6

this was weakest bar cmon man this is worst i seen from you at all.

I'll kill you with my skill, i'll be spittin while you just cough it
I ain't mad though, all the time you suck at this i'll be makin myself a prophet/7 (profit)

Nice bar

Call me Nas cos "you wanna be me", fuck it i'm a dude so call me Devin (pronounced Devon)
And fuck hurricane Katrina, your mum'n' dad created the world's worst natural disaster in nineteen-eighty-seven/8

nice closer but flow was off good personal.


I knew you would be crap, bitch I wasent wrong-cuz/
I was never on your stink ass dick, but your mom-was/

Lame opener and pretty weak but alrite multi

my future aint important, dawg but yours-is/
ask Makaveli to show you how to do a chorus/

again theme is weak not good bar

you claim to be on da throne, but the seat-is-takin/
with all those beefs, you act tuff, but to me-you-fakin/

takin? forst multi the actuall word wud be taken wich wud throw the multi off anyway

man this heat-Im-makin, you will never come close to-me/
this beef-you-creatin, you gettin merk by a so called newbie/

not much of a punch again ure ure ignoring everythin but the rhymes their are other elements

man youre a groupie, probly wanna know bout Em's pets-n-house/
last night your sis told me you were gay, mothafucka gotta accept-it-now/

u really cudda made this a hot bar but again ure forcin the multi and made the 2nd line totally out of context just to rhyme it but the theme wud have been brilliant if u had worked on the 2nd line

man I respect-this-clown, like I respect Da-Dick-Takuh/
winnin against this mothafucka is nuthin but another Deja-Vu/

average bar dont just focus on the multi make the bar have more of a point

you hard as iron, but after this you might-be-melted/
check youself, boy make sure youre tightly-belted/

weak closer man u need to work on alot more then just the multis

i gonna go with matt was just better overall.

[Killa Jones]

Matt:

This shit aint even started but I'm already on the throne
Your crew might realise you're wack after this battle then Tyrone's left all alone/1
Lame opener
I like to spend my spare time writing lyrics and trying to create beats
Whereas this fat bastard worries about dogs dribblin on stolen car seats/2
I liked this coz of snatch and was quite clever
The game don't change people, it only affects those of us who's weak
You need to toughen up, geek, if you don't your future's lookin bleak/3
Lame bar
Hop off my nuts because to me you aint ever gonna be a worthy match
Women tell me that I'm the Brad Pitt, and you're the fat cunt out of "Snatch"/4
Again witht he snatch, but still a nice bar
You damn right in your signature, to win you gotta LOOSEN up like this
Instead of loosening your shit box with your finger everytime you take a piss/5
Nuttin big
You aint even got a clue of what I could do to you?
Let me tell ya, I'll piss all over your wack fucking crew/6
Lame Bar
I'll kill you with my skill, i'll be spittin while you just cough it
I ain't mad though, all the time you suck at this i'll be makin myself a prophet/7 (profit)
Feelin this bar
Call me Nas cos "you wanna be me", fuck it i'm a dude so call me Devin (pronounced Devon)
And fuck hurricane Katrina, your mum'n' dad created the world's worst natural disaster in nineteen-eighty-seven/8
Ok closer

I knew you would be crap, bitch I wasent wrong-cuz/
I was never on your stink ass dick, but your mom-was/
Gay opener
my future aint important, dawg but yours-is/
ask Makaveli to show you how to do a chorus/
Lame again
you claim to be on da throne, but the seat-is-takin/
with all those beefs, you act tuff, but to me-you-fakin/
Lame
man this heat-Im-makin, you will never come close to-me/
this beef-you-creatin, you gettin merk by a so called newbie/
Lame
man youre a groupie, probly wanna know bout Em's pets-n-house/
last night your sis told me you were gay, mothafucka gotta accept-it-now/
Ok personal
man I respect-this-clown, like I respect Da-Dick-Takuh/
winnin against this mothafucka is nuthin but another Deja-Vu/
Not feelin it
you hard as iron, but after this you might-be-melted/
check youself, boy make sure youre tightly-belted/
umm....ok, but weak as fuck closer

MattSMD Hands Down!!

[Tyrone]

aight kool Lyrikhal, Ill work on that


uppin votes!!

[Zac the Ripper]

MattSMD:

This shit aint even started but I'm already on the throne
Your crew might realise you're wack after this battle then Tyrone's left all alone/1

a decent bar, not what I'd go for with an opener, and the 2nd line kinda fell off

I like to spend my spare time writing lyrics and trying to create beats
Whereas this fat bastard worries about dogs dribblin on stolen car seats/2

decent

The game don't change people, it only affects those of us who's weak
You need to toughen up, geek, if you don't your future's lookin bleak/3

nice

Hop off my nuts because to me you aint ever gonna be a worthy match
Women tell me that I'm the Brad Pitt, and you're the fat cunt out of "Snatch"/4

not bad

You damn right in your signature, to win you gotta LOOSEN up like this
Instead of loosening your shit box with your finger everytime you take a piss/5

good

You aint even got a clue of what I could do to you?
Let me tell ya, I'll piss all over your wack fucking crew/6

ehh....

I'll kill you with my skill, i'll be spittin while you just cough it
I ain't mad though, all the time you suck at this i'll be makin myself a prophet/7 (profit)

decent

Call me Nas cos "you wanna be me", fuck it i'm a dude so call me Devin (pronounced Devon)
And fuck hurricane Katrina, your mum'n' dad created the world's worst natural disaster in nineteen-eighty-seven/8

nice personal

Tyrone:

I knew you would be crap, bitch I wasent wrong-cuz/
I was never on your stink ass dick, but your mom-was/

bit of a feed. not too good for an opener

my future aint important, dawg but yours-is/
ask Makaveli to show you how to do a chorus/

can't say that yours is and chorus rhyme too well

you claim to be on da throne, but the seat-is-takin/
with all those beefs, you act tuff, but to me-you-fakin/

nah....

man this heat-Im-makin, you will never come close to-me/
this beef-you-creatin, you gettin merk by a so called newbie/

if it was true, it'd be a lot better of a bar

man youre a groupie, probly wanna know bout Em's pets-n-house/
last night your sis told me you were gay, mothafucka gotta accept-it-now/

those lines didn't rhyme too well either.

man I respect-this-clown, like I respect Da-Dick-Takuh/
winnin against this mothafucka is nuthin but another Deja-Vu/

okay, if this rhymes at all, PLEASE EXPLAIN HOW to me... and try to stay on topic, son, you battling matt, not tite.

you hard as iron, but after this you might-be-melted/
check youself, boy make sure youre tightly-belted/

what we have here is a filler closer, a very bad thing for battlers.

Matt hands fucking down.

[a.i.d.s.]

3 : 0 mattSMD

congratulations :)


mattSMD: +3
Tyrone: -3