BL Day 1: Gatman vs Masen (3:0)

[a.i.d.s.]

rules:

4 - 8 bars (real bars, means !!!!!!TWO!!!!!! lines)
time limit friday
no biting
no feeding
no recycling

votes:

bar by bar votes only
only people who are signed in the BL are allowed two vote



don't forget your links (to battles in the BL), you can post them afterwards this time, if you don't till friday : DQ!


Good Luck:

start

[GaTmAn]

first battle, "gats" already hirin police to be TRACIN-UR-SHIRT/
just come back, and now im kickin your FACE-IN-THE-DIRT/

to be honest tho, this is over u better start ERASING-QUICK
coz the only votes yurl get'll be by EMRACING-DICK/

MASENS-SICK, he must be "dizzee" coz hes WRITING-A-BAR/
but my rhymes so "thick" they cover u, itl be like FIGHTIN-IN-TAR/

YOU'LL SINK, like a FAT-MAN-SLEEPIN-IN-QUICKSAND-JUST-RUSHIN-HIS-LAST-BURGER/
shame the "glocks" that GAT-MANS-KEEPIN-IN-EACHHANDS-JUST-PUSHIN-YOU-PAST-FURTHER/


1st bar- tracing shirt(oulining the body of a murder)
hes just come back to the site n im knockin him back down.

2nd bar self explanitory

3rd bar- dizzee meaning dizzee rascal in his sig

4th bar- just a joke, wid a long multi

im jst having fun

peace

[Ma$eN]

soz its took to long my internet is completly fucked i've had to nip round dannybois to write a few bars, soz they not great but was a rush to get in on time b4 i get Dq'd

Your verses are just multi-mashin, i'd rather watch ya girlfriend continue wit her titty-flashin/
But first ill continue givin' head-bashing, face-smashing as i send another emcee-crashing//

you sit at your computer while the real thugs are on the streets and in da-get-toes / (ghettos)
you try to play the thug life yet your walkin around in your step moms sta-let-toes // (stiletoes)

you just a Gay version of bATMAN thats why you put the G at the front-of-yah-name/
to busy bummin to write yourself a decent verse ya better find some-one-to-blame//

Uncle sam won't be saying 'we want you' coz you ain't got what it takes for the army/
i've seen more meat than you got on your whole body on a single stick of pepperami//

you'll fall to the ground like a soldier-in-iraq not able to conjure-upa-comeback/
theres no way of u winning even our battle league rematch you ain't gonna injure-payback//

usin 2 long multis as a bar ain't gonna beat me go back to basics i didn't even see a per-son-el/
or call 'robin' get him to write your verse coz u rusty-as-hell i come full of ideas i serv-em-well//

Bar 1: his verses he writes r full of multis
Bar 2: straight forward
Bar 3: diss at his name and about his verse
Bar 4: profile says hes joinin the army soon and i'm saying he ain't got muscle(body meat) making him to week, pepperami is a small thin stick of meat
Bar 5: more about the army, we got another match in the league just sayin he won't win it
Bar 6: sayin he has to fill his bars wid long multis should get robin to help like batman does

[chappy]

GATMAN:

first battle, "gats" already hirin police to be TRACIN-UR-SHIRT/
just come back, and now im kickin your FACE-IN-THE-DIRT/

^^Aight

to be honest tho, this is over u better start ERASING-QUICK
coz the only votes yurl get'll be by EMRACING-DICK/

^^Good

MASENS-SICK, he must be "dizzee" coz hes WRITING-A-BAR/
but my rhymes so "thick" they cover u, itl be like FIGHTIN-IN-TAR/

^^Nice concept

YOU'LL SINK, like a FAT-MAN-SLEEPIN-IN-QUICKSAND-JUST-RUSHIN-HIS-LAST-BURGER/
shame the "glocks" that GAT-MANS-KEEPIN-IN-EACHHANDS-JUST-PUSHIN-YOU-PAST-FURTHER/

^^Did well on rhyming all through the multi, but this ruined your verse.


MA$EN:

Your verses are just multi-mashin, i'd rather watch ya girlfriend continue wit her titty-flashin/
But first ill continue givin' head-bashing, face-smashing as i send another emcee-crashing//

^^Meh, didn't feel this..

you sit at your computer while the real thugs are on the streets and in da-get-toes / (ghettos)
you try to play the thug life yet your walkin around in your step moms sta-let-toes //

^^Could be better

you just a Gay version of bATMAN thats why you put the G at the front-of-yah-name/
to busy bummin to write yourself a decent verse ya better find some-one-to-blame//

^^LOL aight...

Uncle sam won't be saying 'we want you' coz you ain't got what it takes for the army/
i've seen more meat than you got on your whole body on a single stick of pepperami//

^^Weak, and isn't 'Uncle Sam' American?

you'll fall to the ground like a soldier-in-iraq not able to conjure-upa-comeback/
theres no way of u winning even our battle league rematch you ain't gonna injure-payback//

^^Not too bad

usin 2 long multis as a bar ain't gonna beat me go back to basics i didn't even see a per-son-el/
or call 'robin' get him to write your verse coz u rusty-as-hell i come full of ideas i serv-em-well//

^^OK


Consistency/Structure: G
Creativity: TIE
Personal: M
Punches: G
Multis: G
Flow: TIE
Metas: M
Enjoyable: TIE
Wordplay: -
Overall: Gatman

Gatman - Not bad for 4 bars, but keep elevatin your improvin.
Ma$eN - Not your best is it? Seen better, but keep goin.

[Demise]

GATMAN

first battle, "gats" already hirin police to be TRACIN-UR-SHIRT/
just come back, and now im kickin your FACE-IN-THE-DIRT/
Avg Not bad at all tho

to be honest tho, this is over u better start ERASING-QUICK
coz the only votes yurl get'll be by EMRACING-DICK/
Nice wording to that so it ddnt sound played good job

MASENS-SICK, he must be "dizzee" coz hes WRITING-A-BAR/
but my rhymes so "thick" they cover u, itl be like FIGHTIN-IN-TAR/
I see where Chappy said good concept but the bar itself is avg

YOU'LL SINK, like a FAT-MAN-SLEEPIN-IN-QUICKSAND-JUST-RUSHIN-HIS-LAST-BURGER/
shame the "glocks" that GAT-MANS-KEEPIN-IN-EACHHANDS-JUST-PUSHIN-YOU-PAST-FURTHER/
LONG ASS MULTI FUCKED THE FLOW WIT A SPIKED DILDO


MA$EN

Your verses are just multi-mashin, i'd rather watch ya girlfriend continue wit her titty-flashin/
But first ill continue givin' head-bashing, face-smashing as i send another emcee-crashing//
Nuthin Special Avg

you sit at your computer while the real thugs are on the streets and in da-get-toes / (ghettos)
you try to play the thug life yet your walkin around in your step moms sta-let-toes //
Again Avg

you just a Gay version of bATMAN thats why you put the G at the front-of-yah-name/
to busy bummin to write yourself a decent verse ya better find some-one-to-blame//
The batman part was funny good bar

Uncle sam won't be saying 'we want you' coz you ain't got what it takes for the army/
i've seen more meat than you got on your whole body on a single stick of pepperami//
Weak

you'll fall to the ground like a soldier-in-iraq not able to conjure-upa-comeback/
theres no way of u winning even our battle league rematch you ain't gonna injure-payback//
Another avg bar

usin 2 long multis as a bar ain't gonna beat me go back to basics i didn't even see a per-son-el/
or call 'robin' get him to write your verse coz u rusty-as-hell i come full of ideas i serv-em-well//
Yet another avg bar


Consistency/Structure: Gat
Creativity: Gat
Personal: Ma$eN
Punches: Gat
Multis: Gat
Flow: Gat
Metas: TIE (Ma$eN's was too bland)
Enjoyable: Gat
Nameplay: Ma$eN
Overall: Gatman got this EASY but anyway Ma$eN ya verse wasnt bad it was just so... so... avg... it was just bland nuthin jumped out except that batman line

[LyRiKhAl]

GATMAN

first battle, "gats" already hirin police to be TRACIN-UR-SHIRT/
just come back, and now im kickin your FACE-IN-THE-DIRT/
Decent opener

to be honest tho, this is over u better start ERASING-QUICK
coz the only votes yurl get'll be by EMRACING-DICK/
nice bar and decent multi

MASENS-SICK, he must be "dizzee" coz hes WRITING-A-BAR/
but my rhymes so "thick" they cover u, itl be like FIGHTIN-IN-TAR/
okish bar but multi cudda been worked on

YOU'LL SINK, like a FAT-MAN-SLEEPIN-IN-QUICKSAND-JUST-RUSHIN-HIS-LAST-BURGER/
shame the "glocks" that GAT-MANS-KEEPIN-IN-EACHHANDS-JUST-PUSHIN-YOU-PAST-FURTHER/
the multi was shit flow fell apart from the start


MA$EN

Your verses are just multi-mashin, i'd rather watch ya girlfriend continue wit her titty-flashin/
But first ill continue givin' head-bashing, face-smashing as i send another emcee-crashing//
alrite opener

you sit at your computer while the real thugs are on the streets and in da-get-toes / (ghettos)
you try to play the thug life yet your walkin around in your step moms sta-let-toes //
average bar was ok but dragged a little
you just a Gay version of bATMAN thats why you put the G at the front-of-yah-name/
to busy bummin to write yourself a decent verse ya better find some-one-to-blame//
didnt like this

Uncle sam won't be saying 'we want you' coz you ain't got what it takes for the army/
i've seen more meat than you got on your whole body on a single stick of pepperami//
alrite concept

you'll fall to the ground like a soldier-in-iraq not able to conjure-upa-comeback/
theres no way of u winning even our battle league rematch you ain't gonna injure-payback//
meh nuthiun special

usin 2 long multis as a bar ain't gonna beat me go back to basics i didn't even see a per-son-el/
or call 'robin' get him to write your verse coz u rusty-as-hell i come full of ideas i serv-em-well//
average closer


my vote goes to ashton fag ( gat)

[GaTmAn]

i resent tht name, IM A DENTON BOI lol

3-0 KO THEN good battle "murda"

[a.i.d.s.]

3 : 0 gatman

dawg, i would never have considered that possible ...

anyway,congrats

gatman: +3
masen: -3