BL Day 1: Dash vs Demise (3:5)

[a.i.d.s.]

rules:

4 - 8 bars (real bars, means !!!!!!TWO!!!!!! lines)
time limit friday
no biting
no feeding
no recycling

votes:

bar by bar votes only
only people who are signed in the BL are allowed two vote



don't forget your links (to battles in the BL), you can post them afterwards this time, if you don't till friday : DQ!


Good Luck:

start

[Demise]

Battle Verse Against DASH
__________________________________________________ _________
GOOD LUCK HOMIE
__________________________________________________ _________
You aint post that SHITTY DROP you must think I’m NO FIGHT/
Just so you know ITTY BLOCKED so she can’t GHOST WRITE//
(He aint dropd n Itty brags bout how she traind Dash n 4 a min she was havin writers block)

You cant see me ya style UNUSED BETWEEN YA SPITS/
You les and fag cuz you CONFUSED BETWEEN THE HIPS//
(Sayin he rusty cuz he dnt battle often on the site and he has undisclosed in his gender spot in his profile)

Ya battles WORTHLESS AND SCRIPTED, can’t win on THIS PAGE MAN//
You suck when ya VERSE IS DEPICTED only win WIT STAGE HANDS//
(Sayin his battles are written 4 him like a script… sayin he gets d/r votes because in his sig he says and more to CUM so same thing but just playin on the play concept)

Im nails to ya chalk board and you choke when you LISTEN TAH ME/
And by the time you read this shit you gon be HIT WIT DEFEAT//
(He’s rarely on and if he keeps it up then he’ll get DQ’d “released” and I spelled the shit the wasy I say it so IT IS A FUCKIN MULTI)

Uppin Ya Vers Homie

[Dash]

I`l CRACK-YOU-IN-THA-MOUTH your TEETH-BE-OPENIN u left SCREAMIN-HELP-ME!!
u tha WACKEST-OF-THESE-CLOWNS you so poor ETHIOPIANS be SEEMING-WEALTHY!!

HURT-THIS-FAGGOT make this FUCKER-FLY and POP-PAST-YA-BLAZE
WORTHLESS-MAGGOT its obv u GONNA-DIE after u DROPPED-AFTER-AIDS!!!

Its NOT-GONNA-TAKE-MUCH to STOP-THIS-INSTIGATOR You Left BRUISED-AND-BEAT
I`m SOCKIN-YA-FACE-BRUH u like *HOT-REFRIGERATORS*by being not USED-TO-HEAT!!

i`m FOOLIN-THIS-CRAP-CHUMP start SORTIN-YOUR-RAP perform this FAGGOTS-DRILL-AND-NECK-BREAK!!
its TRU-YOUR-A-WACK-FUCK been *CAUGHT-IN-THE-ACT* Like tha *PARIS-HILTON-SEX-TAPE!!*



1st bar: easy
2nd bar:dropped = dead.. the guy aids told us th rules then he dropped.. no h8 to aids..
3rd bar:easy
4th bar: lmao remember that!!!.... BUUURNNNN


meh..upping

[Tyrone]

Demise's Verse

You aint post that SHITTY DROP you must think I’m NO FIGHT/
Just so you know ITTY BLOCKED so she can’t GHOST WRITE//
nice opener

You cant see me ya style UNUSED BETWEEN YA SPITS/
You les and fag cuz you CONFUSED BETWEEN THE HIPS//
nice punch

Ya battles WORTHLESS AND SCRIPTED, can’t win on THIS PAGE MAN//
You suck when ya VERSE IS DEPICTED only win WIT STAGE HANDS//
ok bar, decent punch

Im nails to ya chalk board and you choke when you LISTEN TAH ME/
And by the time you read this shit you gon be HIT WIT DEFEAT//
decent closer



Dash's verse

I`l CRACK-YOU-IN-THA-MOUTH your TEETH-BE-OPENIN u left SCREAMIN-HELP-ME!!
u tha WACKEST-OF-THESE-CLOWNS you so poor ETHIOPIANS be SEEMING-WEALTHY!!
avg opener

HURT-THIS-FAGGOT make this FUCKER-FLY and POP-PAST-YA-BLAZE
WORTHLESS-MAGGOT its obv u GONNA-DIE after u DROPPED-AFTER-AIDS!!!
avg bar, weak punch

Its NOT-GONNA-TAKE-MUCH to STOP-THIS-INSTIGATOR You Left BRUISED-AND-BEAT
I`m SOCKIN-YA-FACE-BRUH u like *HOT-REFRIGERATORS*by being not USED-TO-HEAT!!
decent bar

i`m FOOLIN-THIS-CRAP-CHUMP start SORTIN-YOUR-RAP perform this FAGGOTS-DRILL-AND-NECK-BREAK!!
its TRU-YOUR-A-WACK-FUCK been *CAUGHT-IN-THE-ACT* Like tha *PARIS-HILTON-SEX-TAPE!!*
nice closer


my vote: Demise

[D-ManD]

Demise's Verse

You aint post that SHITTY DROP you must think I’m NO FIGHT/
Just so you know ITTY BLOCKED so she can’t GHOST WRITE//
nice opener;is it tru :)

You cant see me ya style UNUSED BETWEEN YA SPITS/
You les and fag cuz you CONFUSED BETWEEN THE HIPS//
nice punch

Ya battles WORTHLESS AND SCRIPTED, can’t win on THIS PAGE MAN//
You suck when ya VERSE IS DEPICTED only win WIT STAGE HANDS//
nice bar,good choice of words

Im nails to ya chalk board and you choke when you LISTEN TAH ME/
And by the time you read this shit you gon be HIT WIT DEFEAT//
I've seen better closers from u


Dash's verse

I`l CRACK-YOU-IN-THA-MOUTH your TEETH-BE-OPENIN u left SCREAMIN-HELP-ME!!
u tha WACKEST-OF-THESE-CLOWNS you so poor ETHIOPIANS be SEEMING-WEALTHY!!
good opener

HURT-THIS-FAGGOT make this FUCKER-FLY and POP-PAST-YA-BLAZE
WORTHLESS-MAGGOT its obv u GONNA-DIE after u DROPPED-AFTER-AIDS!!!
ok I guess..I've seen alot better from u

Its NOT-GONNA-TAKE-MUCH to STOP-THIS-INSTIGATOR You Left BRUISED-AND-BEAT
I`m SOCKIN-YA-FACE-BRUH u like *HOT-REFRIGERATORS*by being not USED-TO-HEAT!!
I don't get it!!!

i`m FOOLIN-THIS-CRAP-CHUMP start SORTIN-YOUR-RAP perform this FAGGOTS-DRILL-AND-NECK-BREAK!!
its TRU-YOUR-A-WACK-FUCK been *CAUGHT-IN-THE-ACT* Like tha *PARIS-HILTON-SEX-TAPE!!*
nice closer


my vote: Demise

[Chess_Intellijenc]

punches: tie
flow: dash
multis: dash
wordplay: tie
vocabulary: demise
humour: dash
personal: demise
opener: dash
closer: demise


vote: dash

[Killa Jones]

punches: dash
flow: demise
multis: dash
wordplay: dash
vocabulary: demise
humour: dash
personal: demise
opener: dash
closer: demise


vote: dash, nice drops from both, id say dash just edged it

[Red Devyl]

DEMISE

You aint post that SHITTY DROP you must think I’m NO FIGHT/
Just so you know ITTY BLOCKED so she can’t GHOST WRITE//
(He aint dropd n Itty brags bout how she traind Dash n 4 a min she was havin writers block)
okay nun big

You cant see me ya style UNUSED BETWEEN YA SPITS/
You les and fag cuz you CONFUSED BETWEEN THE HIPS//
(Sayin he rusty cuz he dnt battle often on the site and he has undisclosed in his gender spot in his profile)
LMAO...............wow now u r tellin me that u r back

Ya battles WORTHLESS AND SCRIPTED, can’t win on THIS PAGE MAN//
You suck when ya VERSE IS DEPICTED only win WIT STAGE HANDS//
(Sayin his battles are written 4 him like a script… sayin he gets d/r votes because in his sig he says and more to CUM so same thing but just playin on the play concept)
lolz ite nice rhymes

Im nails to ya chalk board and you choke when you LISTEN TAH ME/
And by the time you read this shit you gon be HIT WIT DEFEAT//
(He’s rarely on and if he keeps it up then he’ll get DQ’d “released” and I spelled the shit the wasy I say it so IT IS A FUCKIN MULTI
lolz k fyn its a multi yea i say it the same way but u kno we are TEXTEES so we are suppose to rhyme wordz but k

DASH

I`l CRACK-YOU-IN-THA-MOUTH your TEETH-BE-OPENIN u left SCREAMIN-HELP-ME!!
u tha WACKEST-OF-THESE-CLOWNS you so poor ETHIOPIANS be SEEMING-WEALTHY!!
LMAO nice multis

HURT-THIS-FAGGOT make this FUCKER-FLY and POP-PAST-YA-BLAZE
WORTHLESS-MAGGOT its obv u GONNA-DIE after u DROPPED-AFTER-AIDS!!!
not a hard punch but nice rhymes and multis

Its NOT-GONNA-TAKE-MUCH to STOP-THIS-INSTIGATOR You Left BRUISED-AND-BEAT
I`m SOCKIN-YA-FACE-BRUH u like *HOT-REFRIGERATORS*by being not USED-TO-HEAT!!
LMAO nice punch

i`m FOOLIN-THIS-CRAP-CHUMP start SORTIN-YOUR-RAP perform this FAGGOTS-DRILL-AND-NECK-BREAK!!
its TRU-YOUR-A-WACK-FUCK been *CAUGHT-IN-THE-ACT* Like tha *PARIS-HILTON-SEX-TAPE!!*
k............not that hard

Vocab:Tie
Personal: Demise
Punches: Dash
Flow: Tie
Enjoyable: TIE(damn yall were crackin me up)
Multis: Dash................this was hard decision
Metaz: Dash
Vote: Dash

[GaTmAn]

You aint post that SHITTY DROP you must think I’m NO FIGHT/
Just so you know ITTY BLOCKED so she can’t GHOST WRITE//

nice personal, but the multis sound forced n r kinda dull, NO FIGHT/GHOST WITE, u see wt i mean

You cant see me ya style UNUSED BETWEEN YA SPITS/
You les and fag cuz you CONFUSED BETWEEN THE HIPS//

i liked this, nice personal again and nice multi, u cud av made it better tho

Ya battles WORTHLESS AND SCRIPTED, can’t win on THIS PAGE MAN//
You suck when ya VERSE IS DEPICTED only win WIT STAGE HANDS//

you shouldnt write suck, n stuff, sounds cruddy, the first line was NICE tho
i liked the flow

Im nails to ya chalk board and you choke when you LISTEN TAH ME/
And by the time you read this shit you gon be HIT WIT DEFEAT//

multi is forced, but i like the nails n chalkboard stuff, nice,
not the best ender tho, GOOD JOB THO DEMISE, ur elevatin in multis


Dash's verse

I`l CRACK-YOU-IN-THA-MOUTH your TEETH-BE-OPENIN u left SCREAMIN-HELP-ME!!
u tha WACKEST-OF-THESE-CLOWNS you so poor ETHIOPIANS be SEEMING-WEALTHY!!

hmm, i dint reeli like this opener, multis r ok, lil forced, but i dunno i dint like the rip

HURT-THIS-FAGGOT make this FUCKER-FLY and POP-PAST-YA-BLAZE
WORTHLESS-MAGGOT its obv u GONNA-DIE after u DROPPED-AFTER-AIDS!!!

this i did like ,aids line lol

Its NOT-GONNA-TAKE-MUCH to STOP-THIS-INSTIGATOR You Left BRUISED-AND-BEAT
I`m SOCKIN-YA-FACE-BRUH u like *HOT-REFRIGERATORS*by being not USED-TO-HEAT!!

clever with the refriderator line, jst rothing is personal, seems like this battle is directed at no one.

i`m FOOLIN-THIS-CRAP-CHUMP start SORTIN-YOUR-RAP perform this FAGGOTS-DRILL-AND-NECK-BREAK!!
its TRU-YOUR-A-WACK-FUCK been *CAUGHT-IN-THE-ACT* Like tha *PARIS-HILTON-SEX-TAPE!!*

yeah this is good,

hmmm, this battle should go to dash cause he OBV has more talent than demise,
BUT none of his shit was reeli directed at demise, cept the aids bit,
sooo im not sure,

ima say DEMISE,

[Demise]

Link 1: http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=14926&page=2
Link 2: http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=14928&page=1

[4PLAY]

You aint post that SHITTY DROP you must think I’m NO FIGHT/
Just so you know ITTY BLOCKED so she can’t GHOST WRITE//

I liked the punch nice and personal

You cant see me ya style UNUSED BETWEEN YA SPITS/
You les and fag cuz you CONFUSED BETWEEN THE HIPS//

Another one ,A good multie in this too

Ya battles WORTHLESS AND SCRIPTED, can’t win on THIS PAGE MAN//
You suck when ya VERSE IS DEPICTED only win WIT STAGE HANDS//

Work on punches instead of just lots of multies . This sounds forced

Im nails to ya chalk board and you choke when you LISTEN TAH ME/
And by the time you read this shit you gon be HIT WIT DEFEAT//

U choke when u hear a chalk board???



Dash's verse

I`l CRACK-YOU-IN-THA-MOUTH your TEETH-BE-OPENIN u left SCREAMIN-HELP-ME!!
u tha WACKEST-OF-THESE-CLOWNS you so poor ETHIOPIANS be SEEMING-WEALTHY!!

This was decent opener

was feelin this

HURT-THIS-FAGGOT make this FUCKER-FLY and POP-PAST-YA-BLAZE
WORTHLESS-MAGGOT its obv u GONNA-DIE after u DROPPED-AFTER-AIDS!!!

Nice punch ,But faggot / maggot seems pretty baisic

Its NOT-GONNA-TAKE-MUCH to STOP-THIS-INSTIGATOR You Left BRUISED-AND-BEAT
I`m SOCKIN-YA-FACE-BRUH u like *HOT-REFRIGERATORS*by being not USED-TO-HEAT!!

Flow wan'st the best but the line was ite
i`m FOOLIN-THIS-CRAP-CHUMP start SORTIN-YOUR-RAP perform this FAGGOTS-DRILL-AND-NECK-BREAK!!
its TRU-YOUR-A-WACK-FUCK been *CAUGHT-IN-THE-ACT* Like tha *PARIS-HILTON-SEX-TAPE!!*

I liked the paris line





Ovverall i thnk demise took this outta me enjoying it more but dash had some decent punches

still grinin bout the paris line

[Falix]

You aint post that SHITTY DROP you must think I’m NO FIGHT/
Just so you know ITTY BLOCKED so she can’t GHOST WRITE//
(He aint dropd n Itty brags bout how she traind Dash n 4 a min she was havin writers block)
^^I liked this, decent and effective

You cant see me ya style UNUSED BETWEEN YA SPITS/
You les and fag cuz you CONFUSED BETWEEN THE HIPS//
(Sayin he rusty cuz he dnt battle often on the site and he has undisclosed in his gender spot in his profile)
^^second line was nice, good shit

Ya battles WORTHLESS AND SCRIPTED, can’t win on THIS PAGE MAN//
You suck when ya VERSE IS DEPICTED only win WIT STAGE HANDS//
(Sayin his battles are written 4 him like a script… sayin he gets d/r votes because in his sig he says and more to CUM so same thing but just playin on the play concept)
^^this was aight, nice multies

Im nails to ya chalk board and you choke when you LISTEN TAH ME/
And by the time you read this shit you gon be HIT WIT DEFEAT//
(He’s rarely on and if he keeps it up then he’ll get DQ’d “released” and I spelled the shit the wasy I say it so IT IS A FUCKIN MULTI)
^^ok ender




I`l CRACK-YOU-IN-THA-MOUTH your TEETH-BE-OPENIN u left SCREAMIN-HELP-ME!!
u tha WACKEST-OF-THESE-CLOWNS you so poor ETHIOPIANS be SEEMING-WEALTHY!!
^^opener...only part i liked was the ethiopian line, funny

HURT-THIS-FAGGOT make this FUCKER-FLY and POP-PAST-YA-BLAZE
WORTHLESS-MAGGOT its obv u GONNA-DIE after u DROPPED-AFTER-AIDS!!!
^^this was nice, flow is messed a bit in the sec line, dragged a bit

Its NOT-GONNA-TAKE-MUCH to STOP-THIS-INSTIGATOR You Left BRUISED-AND-BEAT
I`m SOCKIN-YA-FACE-BRUH u like *HOT-REFRIGERATORS*by being not USED-TO-HEAT!!
^^ok punch

i`m FOOLIN-THIS-CRAP-CHUMP start SORTIN-YOUR-RAP perform this FAGGOTS-DRILL-AND-NECK-BREAK!!
its TRU-YOUR-A-WACK-FUCK been *CAUGHT-IN-THE-ACT* Like tha *PARIS-HILTON-SEX-TAPE!!*
^^paris hilton punch lines are weak and effective now, 4 year old children can make fun of paris, maybe if u made fun of her in a different way instead of her sex tape, to bring sumptin new, but soon as u said paris hilton, i new the next part was sex tape, you know what i mean? it was to obvious, wouldnt shake a crowd

I think Demise took this, not with ease or "hands down" like some of u r sayin, i jus Dash was a bit more basic then he usually is so Demise jus took this, good battle tho

[TfLaMeZ]

DEMISE
You aint post that SHITTY DROP you must think I’m NO FIGHT/
Just so you know ITTY BLOCKED so she can’t GHOST WRITE//
Good opener, flowed nicely, had a punch. Well done

You cant see me ya style UNUSED BETWEEN YA SPITS/
You les and fag cuz you CONFUSED BETWEEN THE HIPS//
didn't understand it at first, but good punch, made me laugh, lol

Ya battles WORTHLESS AND SCRIPTED, can’t win on THIS PAGE MAN//
You suck when ya VERSE IS DEPICTED only win WIT STAGE HANDS//
what are stage hands? coulda made that line better, not just cuz of stage hands, but how it flowed also. Your rhyme scheme is awkward at times too

Im nails to ya chalk board and you choke when you LISTEN TAH ME/
And by the time you read this shit you gon be HIT WIT DEFEAT//
bad way to end it i think. Coulda made the last line flow better, hit with defeat, and listen to me doesn't go well. Seemed like filler

DASH
I`l CRACK-YOU-IN-THA-MOUTH your TEETH-BE-OPENIN u left SCREAMIN-HELP-ME!!
u tha WACKEST-OF-THESE-CLOWNS you so poor ETHIOPIANS be SEEMING-WEALTHY!!
lol, Ethiopians was a good line, lol, very nice opener

HURT-THIS-FAGGOT make this FUCKER-FLY and POP-PAST-YA-BLAZE
WORTHLESS-MAGGOT its obv u GONNA-DIE after u DROPPED-AFTER-AIDS!!!
lol!! nice pretty good line, Make sure you rhyme in a way that flows with the line length, cuz it gets sloppy sometime

Its NOT-GONNA-TAKE-MUCH to STOP-THIS-INSTIGATOR You Left BRUISED-AND-BEAT
I`m SOCKIN-YA-FACE-BRUH u like *HOT-REFRIGERATORS*by being not USED-TO-HEAT!!
pretty decent, your bars dont flow together well, but a decent line here

i`m FOOLIN-THIS-CRAP-CHUMP start SORTIN-YOUR-RAP perform this FAGGOTS-DRILL-AND-NECK-BREAK!!
its TRU-YOUR-A-WACK-FUCK been *CAUGHT-IN-THE-ACT* Like tha *PARIS-HILTON-SEX-TAPE!!*
I agree with the Played out paris hilton stuff. Your rhyme scheme gets annoying sometimes cuz rhyming the first phrase of your line does nothing for the flow. Work on that

Over all, i'd say Dash had more consistency with where he was comin from.
Demise, nice verse, keep up the good work, but you still got some things to work at. As well as dash. Keep up the good stuff guys

[a.i.d.s.]

if i caount every vote it would be 5 : 5 :)

but i need to take 2 votes from dash cuz they weren't bar by bar so its 5 : 3 for demise.


congratulations :)


demise: +3
dash: -3

[Demise]

Aight aside from the MASSIVE amounts of complaints I can find the respect for you to say...
Good Battle Dash.