BL Day 1: 4 Play vs Bakkie (0:3)

[a.i.d.s.]

rules:

4 - 8 bars (real bars, means !!!!!!TWO!!!!!! lines)
time limit friday
no biting
no feeding
no recycling

votes:

bar by bar votes only
only people who are signed in the BL are allowed two vote



don't forget your links (to battles in the BL), you can post them afterwards this time, if you don't till friday : DQ!


Good Luck:

start

[4PLAY]

I'm make bakkie live up to his name/"Roll" till i make him look a "fag"/
U makin a hot bars like /switchin up future and fact//
I'll be exact/ Snipe u quicker i did roosevelt /
I'm punish this kid/He cower when i loose my belt//
This could can't be sick /If he had a twenty course sitting/
A mic’s a nice change for you /once it aint a dick you grippin//
Ya standards are tripping /Quicker than ya fly’s unzipping /
When u see another guy’s belt buckle slipping //
I’m like Bin laden/Still a threat but u never goin find me/
I can rip you to shreds/But u too dum to define me //
I dishin to much dirt on u / I make ya London, grimey/
U miss understood , old and a bitch /I’ma call u Niyney//(It means gran spelt in welsh, spelt wrong )
Listen u bore us/ We diss you dont know whether to aplaud or ignore us/
U sound like you got someone tone death writin verses and chorus//


ite bro gud luck

[Bakkie]

Im'a Silence you like DEF/mute the speakers/left with no breath,
Ease the hollow tip into ya chess/heart shunned to your death,

Im'a Chip your tooth and mix you with a chocolate~fine~cookie,
Trying to duck me,im'a cock that nine on this punch~line~rookie,

You aint nothing but a pussy,your lyrics more sour than a grape,
you admit your wack thats why ya begging me to feature on ya mixtape,

Im leaving your face squin~ted/like ya grandads ass being in~prin~ted,
Hand Carving lucy's Hinge got you writing wid ya fingure splin~ted,

Ya ryhmes are innocent they shaw~shank to the bottom like Titanic,
I will Twist-yer mind static more than Katrina's deadly Dynamic,

This battles my tactic,4 Rounds on the floor is PLAYS for~ever~Date,
Knocking light punches make you lever~tate your pure~feather~weight,

Yer my shit Elevate i be Moving higher Jumping on the Escelate
Dream of ryhmes you'll never create,'Cause outta 10..4's ya highest rate,

Leaving you in a state weary bitch better fear me dis division~scary,
Ima hay~maker this fairy and daze him more than the krazed vision~ary,

Explained
Bar1=I have high lighted the most important parts,there's wordplay,simlie and puns in there im saying killing him in silence,
Bar2=shud get it easy chocolate chip used simlie n multi's in there.
Bar3=this a punchline he asked for a song of mine for his mixetape and he said he was wack when he performed live says on soundclick.
Bar4=personals n Wordplay in this with Hinge meaning minge and hand carving saying touching get me simple shit,he also hangs wid his grandad a lot.and he did a song bout this girl lucy who got abused.
Bar5=Wordplay with the shaw-shank as in sure-sank like the titanic and the film twista reffering to kitrina n dynamic means to do wid movement.
Bar6=multies,puns,wordplay wid his name you should get what i mean in this bar as in boxing.
Bar7=easy to get using simlie creativity wid his name.
Bar8=hay~maker is a power punch in boxing wordplay again he MC's under the name krazed visionary on soundclick,division reffering to this battle league.

gud luck 4PLAY no beef pure fun hommie UPPIN VOTE'Z

[Killa Jones]

4PLAY

I'm make bakkie live up to his name/"Roll" till i make him look a "fag"/
U makin a hot bars like /switchin up future and fact//
Opening line was nice, but u feel of on the second
I'll be exact/ Snipe u quicker i did roosevelt /
I'm punish this kid/He cower when i loose my belt//
Not feelin this punch
This could can't be sick /If he had a twenty course sitting/
A mic’s a nice change for you /once it aint a dick you grippin//
I liked this bar!!
Ya standards are tripping /Quicker than ya fly’s unzipping /
When u see another guy’s belt buckle slipping //
Another gay punch?why?
I’m like Bin laden/Still a threat but u never goin find me/
I can rip you to shreds/But u too dum to define me //
ok nothing big thou
I dishin to much dirt on u / I make ya London, grimey/
U miss understood , old and a bitch /I’ma call u Niyney//
coz im welsh i like this bar!
Listen u bore us/ We diss you dont know whether to aplaud or ignore us/
U sound like you got someone tone death writin verses and chorus//
ok closer but again nuttin special.

ive seen u murk cats before, but with much harder shit than this.


BAKKIE

Im'a Silence you like DEF/mute the speakers/left with no breath,
Ease the hollow tip into ya chess/heart shunned to your death,
Nice opener
Im'a Chip your tooth and mix you with a chocolate~fine~cookie,
Trying to duck me,im'a cock that nine on this punch~line~rookie,
Love the second line, nice diss
You aint nothing but a pussy,your lyrics more sour than a grape,
you admit your wack thats why ya begging me to feature on ya mixtape,
again ur 2nd lines seem to be stronger
Im leaving your face squin~ted/like ya grandads ass being in~prin~ted,
Hand Carving lucy's Hinge got you writing wid ya fingure splin~ted,
Nice words in this.
Ya ryhmes are innocent they shaw~shank to the bottom like Titanic,
I will Twist-yer mind static more than Katrina's deadly Dynamic,
not feelin this bar
This battles my tactic,4 Rounds on the floor is PLAYS for~ever~Date,
Knocking light punches make you lever~tate your pure~feather~weight,
ok bar
Yer my shit Elevate i be Moving higher Jumping on the Escelate
Dream of ryhmes you'll never create,'Cause outta 10..4's ya highest rate,
ok diss
Leaving you in a state weary bitch better fear me dis division~scary,
Ima hay~maker this fairy and daze him more than the krazed vision~ary,
ok closer nuttin special

Overall: I say Bakkie took this coz his shit was harder and had sum decent bars in there.

1-0 Bakkie

[Bakkie]

LINKS:
http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?p=185163#post185163
http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=14930

Thanks Killa for vote yo 4PLAY gotta drop ya links bro good luck hommie


STILL UPPIN

[Demise]

4PLAY

I'm make bakkie live up to his name/"Roll" till i make him look a "fag"/
U makin a hot bars like /switchin up future and fact//
1st line HOT 2nd line meh

I'll be exact/ Snipe u quicker i did roosevelt /
I'm punish this kid/He cower when i loose my belt//
Meh coulda came harder 1st line was a good set up for a different kinda diss ya know

This could can't be sick /If he had a twenty course sitting/
A mic’s a nice change for you /once it aint a dick you grippin//
LMFAO that was a decent punch

Ya standards are tripping /Quicker than ya fly’s unzipping /
When u see another guy’s belt buckle slipping //
Meh nuthin special... Is he gay? cuz you hintin at that a lot LMFAO naw jp

I’m like Bin laden/Still a threat but u never goin find me/
I can rip you to shreds/But u too dum to define me //
1st line was AGAIN settin up fo sumtn hot but you kinda fell off

I dishin to much dirt on u / I make ya London, grimey/
U miss understood , old and a bitch /I’ma call u Niyney//(It means gran spelt in welsh, spelt wrong )
LMFAO this was funny imo but tha punch coulda hit harder ya know

Listen u bore us/ We diss you dont know whether to aplaud or ignore us/
U sound like you got someone tone death writin verses and chorus//
Good closer I like this

Bakkie

Im'a Silence you like DEF/mute the speakers/left with no breath,
Ease the hollow tip into ya chess/heart shunned to your death,
DAMN nice opener

Im'a Chip your tooth and mix you with a chocolate~fine~cookie,
Trying to duck me,im'a cock that nine on this punch~line~rookie,
Avg bar ddnt hit me hard or nuthin

You aint nothing but a pussy,your lyrics more sour than a grape,
you admit your wack thats why ya begging me to feature on ya mixtape,
2nd line was better but decent punch I liked it

Im leaving your face squin~ted/like ya grandads ass being in~prin~ted,
Hand Carving lucy's Hinge got you writing wid ya fingure splin~ted,
Good bar nice rhyme scheme goin on

Ya ryhmes are innocent they shaw~shank to the bottom like Titanic,
I will Twist-yer mind static more than Katrina's deadly Dynamic,
No

This battles my tactic,4 Rounds on the floor is PLAYS for~ever~Date,
Knocking light punches make you lever~tate your pure~feather~weight,
Whatever avg

Yer my shit Elevate i be Moving higher Jumping on the Escelate
Dream of ryhmes you'll never create,'Cause outta 10..4's ya highest rate,
Again avg

Leaving you in a state weary bitch better fear me dis division~scary,
Ima hay~maker this fairy and daze him more than the krazed vision~ary,
That like 4 avg in a row

This is tought as fuck... 4 Play strtd HOT lines but ended em a lil weak at points and Bakkies verse strtd hot and went to avg land... OVERALL VERSE tho I think Ima have to go wit Bakkie. BARELY BAKKIE GETS MY VOTE imo.

[chappy]

4PLAY:

I'm make bakkie live up to his name/"Roll" till i make him look a "fag"/
U makin a hot bars like /switchin up future and fact//

^^Nice..

I'll be exact/ Snipe u quicker i did roosevelt /
I'm punish this kid/He cower when i loose my belt//

^^OK

This could can't be sick /If he had a twenty course sitting/
A mic’s a nice change for you /once it aint a dick you grippin//

^^Aight

Ya standards are tripping /Quicker than ya fly’s unzipping /
When u see another guy’s belt buckle slipping //

^^LOL...decent

I’m like Bin laden/Still a threat but u never goin find me/
I can rip you to shreds/But u too dum to define me //

^^Decent set-up on your first line, lost it on the second

I dishin to much dirt on u / I make ya London, grimey/
U miss understood , old and a bitch /I’ma call u Niyney//

^^Nah didn't feel this

Listen u bore us/ We diss you dont know whether to aplaud or ignore us/
U sound like you got someone tone death writin verses and chorus//

^^Nah weak..


BAKKIE:

Im'a Silence you like DEF/mute the speakers/left with no breath,
Ease the hollow tip into ya chess/heart shunned to your death,

^^Good opener

Im'a Chip your tooth and mix you with a chocolate~fine~cookie,
Trying to duck me,im'a cock that nine on this punch~line~rookie,

^^Nice

You aint nothing but a pussy,your lyrics more sour than a grape,
you admit your wack thats why ya begging me to feature on ya mixtape,

^^Good personal

Im leaving your face squin~ted/like ya grandads ass being in~prin~ted,
Hand Carving lucy's Hinge got you writing wid ya fingure splin~ted,

^^Didn't like this bar..

Ya ryhmes are innocent they shaw~shank to the bottom like Titanic,
I will Twist-yer mind static more than Katrina's deadly Dynamic,

^^OK

This battles my tactic,4 Rounds on the floor is PLAYS for~ever~Date,
Knocking light punches make you lever~tate your pure~feather~weight,

Yer my shit Elevate i be Moving higher Jumping on the Escelate
Dream of ryhmes you'll never create,'Cause outta 10..4's ya highest rate,

^^Shit hot, nice play on his name, and the flow was tight

Leaving you in a state weary bitch better fear me dis division~scary,
Ima hay~maker this fairy and daze him more than the krazed vision~ary

^^Aight ender..


Consistency/Structure: TIE
Creativity: B
Personal: 4
Punches: B
Multis: B
Flow: TIE
Metas: 4
Enjoyable: TIE
Wordplay: B
Overall: Bakkie

4PLAY - keep goin, you got some good shit, jus use more multis & wordplay, was a good effort.
Bakkie - damn, this was tight, some of your best in there, keep gettin better.

[Bakkie]

safe bro thanks for votes y'all good battle 4PLAY

[a.i.d.s.]

3 : 0 for bakkie


congratulations


bakkie: +3
4Play: -3