Free Agent|| Tryouts Verse Inside Aswell

[Chess_Intellijenc]

battle vs Dash i won 3-2:::

I’m jabbing-so-quick the word dash was burnt to ashes because before he can grab a knife I’ll be stabbing-him-slick the only thing he’s fast to hold is when he’s grabbing-his-dick

Man I’m snapping-his-punchlines, he think he can write gore at me but I be rapping-his-bloodlines, if I stop his blood drops, I’m the controller of his life time, can instantly put him to shame like rejected-deadlines

this guy ‘s a weirdo, he doesn’t mind getting fucked-by-boars, I caught his dick stucked-in-doors how sad does a man get, he’s a disgrace to his race, so I’m setting a mine to clock-his-jaw

you can’t analyse my punches, they make reality-fake, anytime I use them they make brutality-cake my mentality is as swift as a snake, reading these scripts got your morality-break

I shoot-bullets-in-twins accurately like snapping picture-shots, you obey me like scripture-plots, boot-dashes-to-wins the only one I’m hating are amateur-squats, he certain to rookie in time like fruit-rotting-begins

[Mc-Itty]

chessington :) ...whats good...u shud try out fo N.A.O cuz ittys in it lmao

btw....GET YA ASS RECORDIN FO DANNYS DISS.

[Dash]

chess i dont like what youve justr said, you DID NOT BEAT ME

[Chess_Intellijenc]

my bad even though i did but you beat me aswell so you can say that lol

[TfLaMeZ]

I’m jabbing-so-quick the word dash was burnt to ashes because before he can grab a knife I’ll be stabbing-him-slick the only thing he’s fast to hold is when he’s grabbing-his-dick
Jabbing quick wont induce burning of a name in ashes. How can you stab someone slick? and how is "the only thing he’s fast to hold is when he’s grabbing-his-dick" that supposed to be a punchline?

Man I’m snapping-his-punchlines, he think he can write gore at me but I be rapping-his-bloodlines, if I stop his blood drops, I’m the controller of his life time, can instantly put him to shame like rejected-deadlines
Actually not too bad. Still kinda wierd tho. Usually when we rap (vocally or textually) we make sure it means something ;)

this guy ‘s a weirdo, he doesn’t mind getting fucked-by-boars, I caught his dick stucked-in-doors how sad does a man get, he’s a disgrace to his race, so I’m setting a mine to clock-his-jaw
The only reason i squeezed out a laugh at this one was cuz you actually said "fucked by boars." lmao. You would never last in a real battle. And how do you go from sticking a dick in a door, to disgracing a whole race? And what are you setting to clock his jaw? is that supposed to be a diss?

you can’t analyse my punches, they make reality-fake, anytime I use them they make brutality-cake my mentality is as swift as a snake, reading these scripts got your morality-break
Sort of an okay line. I dont understand how talking about punches making brutality cake is an affective line for a battle...and honestly..Snakes dont have that big of brains..so saying you have mentality swift like a snake is like..pretty much making fun of yourself. These sound like forced lines to go along with the rhymes to me.

I shoot-bullets-in-twins accurately like snapping picture-shots, you obey me like scripture-plots, boot-dashes-to-wins the only one I’m hating are amateur-squats, he certain to rookie in time like fruit-rotting-begins
shooting bullets in twins...hm..your a real gangster. Amateur squats..you'll have to let me know what those are. Your rhyming sucked in this. Stop trying to make every god damned word rhyme, you'd sound like a moron in audio. You'd have a mouthful of shit

[Chess_Intellijenc]

if you dont understand it just dont analyse it, it's that simple

[TfLaMeZ]

But i'm right..all i asked you for was a couple explanations. Its not a matter of understanding if i can critique your verse that much. If your as smart as this, i can't wait to see yoru next battle :rolleyes:

[Chess_Intellijenc]

chessington :) ...whats good...u shud try out fo N.A.O cuz ittys in it lmao

btw....GET YA ASS RECORDIN FO DANNYS DISS.


yeh i'll tryout for it and i'm awaiting the dun part to record