Twisted Illusion vs. Falix (1-5)

[Twisted Illusion]

5-10 bars
5 votes 3-0 KO
1 verse
I'll spit first

[Twisted Illusion]

if these aren't the links i voted on, then ill get the two up that are.

http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?p=119163#post119163
http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?p=119164&posted=1#post119164

[Twisted Illusion]

Ill have this cat pleading... ‘why spin beating?’ Fuck a reason!
I’ll keep going til you bleeding...welcome to spin hunting season.
I’m impeding...your body with text readings...my styles’ ex-ceeding
you provoked these speaking...now I would stop you from breathing.
and vocals leaking...cause my words like fireworks on Memorial weekend.
Back on a quest for the crown...Vexing with nouns...(check)ing you clown.
we can’t ‘hear’ your part of the round...cause i disconnected your ‘sound’.
this ‘mute’ bound...to defeated. the pound...is the heat. your weak
underground.

[Falix]

yeah my bad i was away yesterday,

get my links in a moment

you must have your ILLUSIONS TWISTED
you say ur the hottest rapper but on the BILLBOARDS ur not even LISTED
you dont even have a fan that likes you
jus 50 geek stalkers waiting outside trying to snipe you
i didnt find ne thing about ur verse appealing
probably because of all those rhymes you been stealing
you know, thats a really bad habit
when the people ur stealing from cant rap and are really bad at it
get me outta this thread, i shoulda been dead
for goin off and sayin some dumb shit i shouldnt have said
or maybe im jus seein things, whats the conclusion
my brain is showin me some fucked up TWISTED ILLUSIONS

[Falix]

http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=10157
http://forum.eminem.net/showthread.php?t=10192

[hawkeye]

Consistency/Structure: tw
Creativity:tw
Enjoyable: tw
Flow:tw
Metaphors: f
Multies: f
Personal:f
Punches:f
Vocabulary: tw
Wordplay:f
Overall: tw

[.:Slim Shady:.]

Consistency/Structure: falix
Creativity:twisted
Enjoyable: falix
Flow:tie
Metaphors: falix
Multies: falix
Personal:falix
Punches:falix
Vocabulary: twisted
Wordplay:falix
Overall: falix

[raider]

Consistency/Structure: falix
Creativity:twisted
Enjoyable: falix
Flow:twisted
Metaphors: falix
Multies: none
Personal:falix
Punches:falix
Vocabulary: twisted
Wordplay:falix
Overall: falix

[ENFINITEE]

Consistency/Structure:FALIX
Creativity:FALIX
Enjoyable: FALIX
Flow:FALIX
Metaphors:FALIX
Multies: FALIX
Personal:FALIX
Punches:FALIX
Vocabulary: FALIX
Wordplay:FALIX
Overall:FALIX

KO,NO RETALIATION

[Falix]

3-1 me, hawk eye voted him >.<

[FrOg]

yo

Consistency/Structure: falix
Creativity:twisted
Enjoyable: falix
Flow:twisted
Metaphors: falix
Multies: none
Personal:falix
Punches:falix
Vocabulary: twisted
Wordplay:falix
Overall: falix (it was realy a massacre lol)

[Falix]

yo

Consistency/Structure: falix
Creativity:twisted
Enjoyable: falix
Flow:twisted
Metaphors: falix
Multies: none
Personal:falix
Punches:falix
Vocabulary: twisted
Wordplay:falix
Overall: falix (it was realy a massacre lol)

lmao, thx

[madchild]

4-1 for Falix so far. More votes ...

[madchild]

Twisted Illusion:

Ill have this cat pleading... ‘why spin beating?’ Fuck a reason!
I’ll keep going til you bleeding...welcome to spin hunting season.

Sorry, but I really don't know what you mean by "spin". It flowed though.

I’m impeding...your body with text readings...my styles’ ex-ceeding
you provoked these speaking...now I would stop you from breathing.

Alright storytelling.

and vocals leaking...cause my words like fireworks on Memorial weekend.
Back on a quest for the crown...Vexing with nouns...(check)ing you clown.

Pretty weak diss, but an alright simile in the first line.

we can’t ‘hear’ your part of the round...cause i disconnected your ‘sound’.
this ‘mute’ bound...to defeated. the pound...is the heat. your weak
underground.

Overall, I didn't really feel like you were dissing your opponent much. You have to direct him more. More punchlines too, rather than just focusing on rhyming and multies.

Score: 4/10

Falix:

you must have your ILLUSIONS TWISTED
you say ur the hottest rapper but on the BILLBOARDS ur not even LISTED

Nice intro. Good play off his name.

you dont even have a fan that likes you
jus 50 geek stalkers waiting outside trying to snipe you

Interesting.

i didnt find ne thing about ur verse appealing
probably because of all those rhymes you been stealing

Nice interpretation of his verse.

you know, thats a really bad habit
when the people ur stealing from cant rap and are really bad at it

Haha funny. Good play off the last bar, as well as, the multie.

get me outta this thread, i shoulda been dead
for goin off and sayin some dumb shit i shouldnt have said

Funny as well. The last line sounds like something Eminem has said though.

or maybe im jus seein things, whats the conclusion
my brain is showin me some fucked up TWISTED ILLUSIONS

Nice closer.

Overall, you're just lacking with metaphors.


Score: 8/10

Vote - Falix

[Falix]

thx for the feed madchild-much respect